Ease your way into
your skin
as rainbow fell
from blue
in heaven
that seemed
perfectly natural
but when feathers
tickle sky leaving
a laughing hurry of
wishful thinking
a lasting
impressionist
leaves one
last mark
on this world
in rainbows.
A contest entry
- artist by zillion.
450 points, ended August 7, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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I disagree with Zillion...I feel that both of the "rainbows" are far enough apart that they dont conflict each other. Fine job.
Warmest,
Mylee -
I feel like having 'rainbow' twice in such a short poem was kind of redundant. Still, this is a good, solid, start you have here.
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I really like this. Now you need some text editing!
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