They say only the innocent can see magical things,
stay and listen to the story, the wonder it brings.
I: Sonnet
Was always a fey child, aloof, alone,
wise beyond her years, she kept to herself.
All childish things but Teddy, long outgrown,
in just the right light, looks like an Elf.
Wandering all alone in the deep woods,
a daily thing for a couple of years.
Searching the underbrush for herbal goods,
communing with nature, she has no fears.
Curious buzzing right behind her eyes,
something never experienced before.
From neck, to shoulders, arms, hips and thighs,
a chime sounds, she falls to the forest floor.
She dreams of... falling into the abyss,
a clawed hand reaching out of the darkness.
II: Septolet
Clawed fingers
grasping air
searching....
Instinctive reaction
reach out, stretch
a touch,
full contact
III: Rondel
She awakens to a tiny Dragon sitting on her chest,
little whirling eyes watching, she blinks away the spell.
Wondered what he was doing, if he'd care to tell,
if she didnt know better, he looked a bit distressed.
Screwing up her courage, put an idea to test,
holding out a tiny finger, Hello, my name's Joelle.
She awakens to a tiny Dragon sitting on her chest,
little whirling eyes watching, she blinks away the spell.
He speaks to her in her mind, only her, not the rest,
laughing a little laugh then, he sounded like a bell.
Flying up to her shoulder, now I don't have to yell,
a chance meeting or was it? They have both been blessed.
She awakens to a tiny Dragon sitting on her chest.
IV: Tanka
They are now bonded
the bond cannot be broken
except by a death
three years old, dragon impressed,
adventures are yet to come
Author notes
Love you Tory.
Heh.
Part I: Sonnet: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/sonnet.html
Part II: Septolet: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/septolet.html
Part III: Rondel: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/rondel.html
Part IV: Tanka: http://www.shadowpoetry.com/resources/wip/tanka.html
I wrote this for this picture prompt contest: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2416725
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A contest entry
- Cute Picture Prompt by kiwigirljacks.
600 points, ended August 6, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - RAVENOUS FETISH for UNUSUAL poetry FORMS by dogpooper.
600 points, ended October 9, 18 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Septulet and Tanka new to me
The decasyllabic sonnet fits the scheme and flows naturally. -
Three
Back soon
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Wow
I am always in awe of people who can actually do form poetry that I can read w/o wanting to commit homicide.
'fey' is a cool word, and the fact that you capitalize the creatures (e.g. Elf) makes it more significant, and...magical...which I'm sure you intended.
"Herbal goods"
'Herbal' really shouldn't be capitalized...in my opinion. It's not the name, it's not a country, an ethnicity, or even particularly significant (correct me if I'm wrong though!!)
"a chime sounds, she falls to forest floor."
I love this line...the "chime sounds" seems mystical...
"searching...."
You've used the ellipsis (...) in the poems...but for this one, there are 4 periods when there should be 3.
"my names"==>"my name's"
Unless you are adverse to apostrophes (hope you're not.)
That tanka is gorgeous!!!
Good luck
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Excellent!
You really outdid yourself here brother, but I guess there's no such thing when it comes to the arts. But let me say this, I deeply enjoyed this, and thank you for sharing here.
Much love brother, peace, Timothy.
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Wondeful job and I know kiwi enjoyed this
best wishes to you in the contest
Love you
Tory
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What a charming story you have penned!! And I am duly impressed with the forms! Blended together to tell such a precious story! Very well done indeed, thank you for entering!
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WOW
Your amazing talent just causes me to stop, pause, and admire the heck out of your poetry!
Geez but this was....wow!
Can't even find adequate words to tell you how I enjoyed your little story
I wish you the best of luck; I sense gold
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