temple to toes
you contain a cloud vessel
and lighten its weight
with the shimmer
of thought.
i have a screen
and ten seconds to outcolor
the neon bulbs
before the surgeon comes in
to tell the world
it’s too late
to operate on an abstract concept.
but we don’t need a glass slipper
when you candle possibility
beneath gas lamps, chandeliers,
and sunlight.
you can do it the right way.
in the plural and with a solid margin
for error.
until eureka fits the feet.
Author notes
Aug. 5, 2008
Just randomly wrote this for Polly.
Well, the poem itself isn't really random.
Though I barely know her, in fact.
From all the conversations we've had she's a very intelligent, passionate person, and she's often taken time to explain me stuff.
And soooo... I hope you like this, Polly 
In a list
A contest entry
- A Rose For You In Appreciation. by Poetryintheblood.
425 points, ended August 18, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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What a lovely and intriguing poem!
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Thanks!
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i love it... very creative.. nice imagery..
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oh cool. 'temple to toes' is a very unique image.
'cloud vessel' NIIICE
and your ending. ZOMD!
You have such an interesting style and I LOVE it. You are so good!
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This is a really intelligent and provocative piece. I shared this with my husband, too, and he was also somewhat astounded by concepts like "it’s too late
to operate on an abstract concept" and "with a solid margin for error." Keep up the excellent work.
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when you candle possibility
beneath gas lamps, chandeliers,
and sunlight"
Love this image. It's very beautiful. Like this in general, really enjoy your style, it provokes thought.
Wasn't entirely sure about "shimmer/ of thought" but that's just me, shimmer and I have a dislike for each other. -
Thank you for your beautiful dedication, good luck in my contest, Josie
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you write well. when i think of you, i think of namita. i miss nami.
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i'm liking this
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I truly love the whimsy in this poem. The tone is terrific. Phrases I think exceptional: "operate on an abstract concept," "candle possibility beneath gas lamps," "until eureka fits the feet." I especially like the two sided meanings of words and phrases here.
Your poetry is so very easy to read and digest. That is a true talent.
~ Joyce
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Thank you very much for your kind comment
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you know the more and more i read you work the more and more i can't think of what to say, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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this is amazing! Thank you so much for this wonderful dedication 
I love it! I'm blushing at all the lovely things that you say about me 
- I am just completely astounded and honoured! The poem itself is simply beautiful - and I love the way that you can slide in your knowledge with such ease it comes together perfectly and adds so much depth to your poetry
Keep writing!
Polly
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Yay, I'm so glad that you got to read it, and that you liked it. I was afraid you wouldn't like it
But anyway, I mean what I said in there 
And thank you for the comment, too
~Diana
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ohhhhhh I like this
. I need to read more of your stuff, I've fallen sorely behind
~sailor ptolema
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lol I was just commenting something of yours
well should you want to read my poetry, you know where most of it is but don't feel like you have to.
thanks for your comment and applause - I'm glad you liked this
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Of course I don't feel like i have to!!! I want to. I've just been so busy with summer classes, finals, and work that I've fallen terribly behind in reading people's poetry!
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I'm a bit tired today, so this may be one of my lamer comments..
but I love your use of fairytale language here without creating a cliche that made me groan, really nice use of language.
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yay, you got that 'cause that's really what I was trying to do with the glass slipper and fitting. Thanks for your comment Always nice to hear your opinion.
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"but we don’t need a glass slipper
when you candle possibility"
This is wonderful poetry, Diana and I simply love the way you play with words and then make them work for you. I think at the end of the day you're one poet who can say 'eureka'!
~ Nicolette
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Thank you, Nicolette
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An interesting indeed!
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Thanks
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"but we don’t need a glass slipper
when you candle possibility
beneath gas lamps, chandeliers,
and sunlight."
- I loved how you have used the word "candle" here and in a way that brings the poem into a very different light. (no pun intended) Your second stanza is also well penned and I like the inclusion of the neon bulbs and the surgeon imagery. I'm thinking it's about a few different things, tied together, but I could be wrong. I liked all the oddness to the flow and form and actually think it benefited your expression. A lot of the lines seemed to flow as it was intended, with the theory of change and the impossibly unkown always there behind the curtain.
Very different and wonderful writing Diana.
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Thank you very much
And who knows, maybe it is about more things. My puns in poetry are intended
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LOL. Well I like that mysteriousness
to your writing. And you my dear
are very welcome.
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