When old Malayans wrote pantoums
To try to charm a ladies heart
They read their verse in private rooms
So new romance could make a start
To try to charm a ladies heart
The French retrieved this ancient form
So new romance could make a start
They chose to make their pantoums warm
The French retrieved this ancient form
Americans then wrote them well
They chose to make their pantoums warm
So many tales they had to tell
Americans then wrote them well
They changed the art in sev'ral ways
So many tales they had to tell
Of deeds performed in ancient days
They changed the art in sev'ral ways
They read their verse in private rooms
Of deeds performed in ancient days
When old Malayans wrote pantoums
Author notes
Malayan Pantoums are all 8 syllable lines so I have stuck to that, European and American ones do not follow the rule.
A contest entry
- CONTEST: WRITE A VILLANELLE OR PANTOUM by PoeticLove.
1600 points, ended August 18, 11 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Nicely written Interesting too.
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Thanks, Now it's perfect and going straight to the finals, Yessa, love it.
PL
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I edited the line because I didn't like the flow of the second use, and I only changed the first one!
I can't help being an idiot.
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This was a good and fascinating history lesson on pantoum's
The theme itself was very creative.
I really liked how you brought out the way the Malayan's used the Pantoum poetry to woo their lady friends with. It gives this Pantoum a personal touch. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest, Yessa!
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Bravo
One of my favorite forms when done well, and this one is unique and absolutely superb! Needless to say that I loved it a ton! bravo... bravo.. bravo...
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Put together like an Airfix Spitfire - AND you painted it first! Light-hearted but impressive work, bro, explaining a form by exemplifying it. Not bad.
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Wonderful job honey.
Very good indeed of course
what I h eard about your guys's pantoums lol was hilarious..but I loved it.
Love you
Passions
Good luck to you
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I really loved the progression of the poem and how it came back to the beginning at the end. Terrific use of form!
Good luck in the contest!
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Boffo, Jeff, Boffo!
wonderful
Good luck in the contest.
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I think you did a wonderful job composing this pantoum. Sometimes writing these makes you want to pull your hair out.
Love,
Amera♥
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Fascinating Jeff, a bit of poetic history and I thank you for this most enjoyable 'pantoum.'
All the best,
mj.
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