Drawn into the form,
Captured by the relevance
of each sep'rate sound.
Gliding syllables that meet
as they are drawn together.
Author notes
A poem for form poetry, especially tanka, which this is. Although I'm a free verse kind of person, I'm finding a new appreciation for well done form poetry.
Oh, and my Utah accent apparently has separate as two syllables (sep'rate) rather than three (sep'a'rate), and I think it flows better like that, so I just put in a accent there. 
Please tell me what you think
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I enjoyed reading your tanka,,,I am in love with the tanka form myself. I like the rhythm of the last two lines. The 3rd line has an extra syllable that can be remedied easily. Write on fellow poet and thanks for commenting on mine.
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That's so odd, I hadn't noticed that till now. I was doing sep'rate instead of sep'a'rate.
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