The dawn comes without
break or bright.
It dances on a gentle rain,
tiny sparkles separate it from the night.
Leaves turn up to drink
as they soften their fall.
The dew healing them from
their scorched August thrall.
No sound and fury.
No thunder or jagged light.
Only a breeze whispering goodbye
as it kisses away the night.
Please tell me what you think
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'Only a breeze whispering goodbye.'
Very poetic and serene. I appreciate this.
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Nice write. Congrats on being featured "in the spotlight" on the front page of the site.
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A beautiful transition from the visual through physical to the spiritual vision of dawn. Very well-composed, particularly the last stanza!
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wow, this was realllly amazing, i was blown a way, i love the last stanza or paragraph or whatever:
No sound and fury.
No thunder or jagged light.
Only a breeze whispering goodbye
as it kisses away the night..
It's so DEEP!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The title is really nice as well, did you come up with it?! well you must probably did, but extremely creative indeed =D
I wouldn't change a thing from this, keep it as it is, it's AMAZING {once again}
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Leaves turn up to drink
as they soften their fall.
The dew healing them from
their scorched August thrall.
Wowie! Beautiful piece!! Congrats on making the spotlight!
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This is so lovely and sweet. What a beautiful poem!! This is excellent!!! I really like the way you said only a breeze whispering goodbye as it kisses away the night!! well done!! I love it!!!♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥
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gentle
nice and gentle--the way dawn does show up. a pleasant read.
although--the word "thrall" seems slightly out of place. almost too big for the poem.
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Nice tribute to the onset of daybreak. Well written and easy on the eyes. Happy trails
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Ah..what a fresh immagesry your brought to bring the depth of the life..wonderful indeed..I love this piece..well done..and my thanks for sharing this beautiful piece with me...
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Caputred the Moment
Got me some catching up to do I see
This is beautiful and I have no words just totally enjoying the moment Thank you for the smile.
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Lord I can just imagine sitting in the night feeling all of the detail of this poem, its truly a beautiful write, kudos my friend!
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VEry Beautiful!!!!!
This brings us right into the dawn with your beautiful and vivid imagery...Great job on the rhyme sceam along with great choice of vocabulary...I could see the dawn breaking through the darkness of the night as I journeyed though this wonderful piece on nature!!! Thanks for sharing David!!! Again, Just Beautiful!!!! ~~~Toni~~~
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