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So Few Dances

I thought I'd give love a try
smiled and looked it in the eye


and then I blinked.


Couldn't let myself go through it
I choked up and couldn't do it


and then you winked.

You put my name in parentheses

my temperature rose ten degrees

 

and my pulse raced.

 

I never have been quite the same

since that day you took my name

 

it was embraced.

 

Life and laughter filled with sighs

sorries after harsh goodbyes

 

all the extremes.

 

A wish that you could have more time

a friendship that was not part-time

 

just wasted dreams.

 

I have not left that many chances

There will not be that many dances

 

and so I stood

 

Seeing you across the room

leave it to me to assume

 

that you would

 

cross the floor and take my hand

hold me close and understand

 

I'd two left feet.

 

Show me how it's just like rhyme

To dance when there's so little time

 

make life complete.

 

For there will  not be many new glances

life offers me so few dances ...

 

Lead me out onto the floor

life offers so few more.

 

Wonderful chances ... 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Flowergirl
    August 30

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    wow that was just outstanding i loved it...i hadto read a few times because it was soooo great....i love how it all flowed so nicly 2gether...


  • toomysterious
    August 22
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    Love this, so lyrical. Also, a comment you made below, "it just came to me that way", everytime I say that people act like I am an alien. That is how most of my poetry evolves. Not some carefully plotted, lined, rhymed and meter thing, but what comes to me. LOL Good to see I am not alone.


  • camille-morin
    August 20
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    This poem has such a sweet character. Extremely well written.


  • quantumsurveyor
    August 20

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    "And then you winked." A delightful image inside a delightful poem that is harboured with such delicate sweetness.

  • TyrannyForestFairy
    August 8

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    Beautiful

    Beautiful composition! I loved the theme to this with the rhyme and the romance incorported. The journey is lovely and really expresses heaps. Great work, I loved this.

    ~Emily~ xx

    • piccola gold member
      August 18
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      thank you so much for reading and commenting. I'm so glad you like it.

  • darkknight marellus
    August 8

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    Wow. I really like this poem. The rhyme scheme was a bit of a trip, but I thoroughly enjoyed the read. It's different, the scheme. I notice a sort of "a,a,c,b,b,c" flow here. Is that right?

    This is such a great poem. I wish I could write this well! You are very talented. Your imagery is just so vivid, so real, I feel jealous. Did he dance with you yet? Was it good?

    But I thank you for sharing. As you said, I feel like a bit of a voyeur. Thank you, again.

    • piccola gold member
      September 20
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      upon thinking about it ... I think it's just aab aab

      maybe.
    • piccola gold member
      August 18
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      I don't know what the rhyme scheme is lol. It just came to me that way. (in the tu No, we've never danced and never met. It's all just a dream. (sigh) Thank you for commenting

  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    August 8

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    This is a private poem of feelings, anticipation and hope. It is a fragile write that bares ones timidity but shows great courage in taking a chance. Well written piece.

    Dennis

    • piccola gold member
      August 18
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      As always your comments are very encouraging. What is life without the ability to dream ...

  • a lonely soul
    August 8

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    This is a very sweet piece of work, yet in a sense it seems a little sad too. I got two different things from it, but yeah you did a good job from it. Keep up the nice writes.
    ~~Tori~~

    • piccola gold member
      August 18
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      It is meant to be about aging ... so I think you got it. Yes, it is sad ... thank you for reading and commenting. Sorry I am so late in replying.

  • Lost Vampyre Angel gold member
    August 7

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    Sweet

    this is so sweet hun, i really love your rhyme scheme throughout this, it is very touching and kin this poem, very romantic with at the same time being in a state of awe with this. all my love,
    kitty xxx

  • Musimwa
    August 7

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    Touching...

    Poetic indeed. Thought provoking, i can say. But i think, you can lead us to a new dance. That will be your own dance. I love this your piece. It is touching. Keep it up dear poet.

    Good day.

    • piccola gold member
      August 18
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      thank you for reading and commenting. The music to life seems to be slowing to a stop ...
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