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Reflections

Missing image


I gaze upon your soul,
through tears of misty lace.
Wishing love was there,
just the smallest trace,

Yet all I found were lies,
premeditated speech.
Revealing all the secrets,
as you stand and preach.

Don't you see the cracks?
Do you feel no guilt?
Freezing their emotions,
then leaving them to wilt.

Harbouring their nightmares,
showing no affection.
Tearing them all down,
no offer of protection.

Grave games you play,
with sinister desires.
One day you will burn,
within self made fires.

 

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"Darkened Decadence"

Picture credit: http://s290.photobucket.com/albums/ll272/Temptress41/Dark/?action=view¤t=gothicart251.png

Not a lot of decoding needed here...Meh, muse sucks right now and won't write what I want it to!

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  • Kazytc gold member
    August 26

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    Fabulous and thought provokingly empathic!

    Wow this cuts deep too, right to the core of ones very existance, the soul and beyond. The empathy and the strong impactual graphics are powerfully conveyed and felt here. You really feel the pain and hurt amidst the penned perfection so much a trademark to you in uniqueness. Fantastic! Love it! Well done! Write on!
    Poetic Hugs,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx


  • Lost Vampyre Angel gold member
    August 24

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    your muse is very very much alive and kicking young lady this is amazing, i love your rhyme it is flawless m'dear didnt freeze or cease to be in any parts and you did very good on the photo, it was slightly cliche but very well penned
    all my love
    kitty xxx

  • LymphBeauty gold member
    August 23

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    loved it!
    loved the way you expressed your hurt and pain! and oh how Ihave been here before.
    I love your pics and backgrounds...I feel like I have seen you and your work before.
    Do you have a msn space?
    ::LB::


  • XXheartbroken3XX
    August 19
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    very emotional.
    very powerful.
    love it!
    OH N VERY VERY DARK!!
    and sad,


  • MarlboroGirl
    August 19

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    This painted a picture in my head, so I liked it, reminds me of someone who's destructive..
    Oh yeah thanks for the comment on mine
    Have you ever read Tales From The Dark Tower?


  • jake2610
    August 16

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    Fabulous

    I'm really no poetry critic, I just started writing my self but really enjoyed this. Brilliant read great rhythm and flow.


  • PastelMoons
    August 10

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    This is fantastic
    I agree with Kiwi
    this sounds like a bad
    ex or the devil
    (but then again
    define the difference...?)
    hehe
    A stunning piece
    you've penned
    As usual
    you rock!
    ~Pastel


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 9

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    Have you met my ex then????
    You could be describing him here.

    You could also be describing other things.. such as the Devil.. especially with those last two stanzas!!

    Love this poem hun... it's dark in an aching way... the type of way that makes you just want to shake someone and ask "why why why??"



  • Disturbed Prodigy gold member
    August 9

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    You amazing me more and more the words you craft dance in the mind like a haunting painting or image, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • sidewinder silver member
    August 9

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    crimson tears fall within that shattered mind ...where blame finds it's victim ..
    laughing. howling in glee
    where another life is ruined


    yes I hear you so clearly
    Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
    Bill


  • notorious
    August 8

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    Eek, one of those pictures featuring a girl and surefire desolation...BLAH.
    But it does have some nice purpureous going on, so that kind makes up for it.

    Anyways...moving on. Here's my ditty on your poem.

    "tears of misty lace"
    This makes me think of Victorian clothes...those...face veil thingamabobbies...LoL.
    Cool line, though it could also be (maybe...maybe not) "lace-misted tears" or something. 'of' is an interesting word, but one that should avoid repetition.
    Although...the rest of your poem doesn't use 'of'.
    What the hell am I talking about?!!!

    'wilt' is a kick-ass word.

    I just noticed it rhymed...LoL. Guess you can't chance it to "lace-misted tears" even if you wanted to, which you probably didn't.

    Good luck

    To use your word, stunning.


    • LadyDementia gold member
      August 9
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      Didn't it feel great to say stunning...such an awesome...no stunning word

  • aboomer silver member
    August 8

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    Great words for that picture! You can feel the darkness, depth, sorrow, loss and anger in your words - and your images are great!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • Fritz O skennick silver member
    August 8

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    Wow, That was deep...

    Honest & heart-felt with a soft layer of darkness that stirs the soul...
    As always, great rhyme, rhythm & flow...
    Another fantastic write...
    Well done!!!


  • jcat gold member
    August 8

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    I think that so many women have stood here before....having their hearts shattered by those that pretend to love them. This was very well done and the sadness and despair were intense!! Best wishes...


  • RiNgMaSt3r
    August 8
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    cool pic

  • Lost Vampyre Angel gold member
    August 8
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    http://s290.photobucket.com/albums/ll272/Temptress41/Dark/?action=view¤t=gothicart251.png
    is this ok?
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