the lane was full.
i wheeled my rickety cart
across laminate linoleum
to another cash register;
-a longer line.
i swivelled around gum encrusted wheels
and discovered to my delight [fright]
that all of the queues were
e q u a l .
In a list
A contest entry
- Simple by Elavina.
800 points, ended August 17, 14 entries
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Comments
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I liked the style that you have. I also like you choice of a moment. Most people choose something that really stands out to them, like birth death life or nature. You choose something differnt from that. I also really like the way you spaced the "equal" at the end. It makes the whole poem.
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Really creative and nice use of every day observation!
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