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needles



i.

i became addicted to the evening news. it filled up the hours that i could've spent cooking food that would never be eaten and sewing clothes that would never be worn.

i liked the grim stories of murder and deceit. it just proved that my life wasn't the worst out there.

ii.

you would always come home late in my head. probably 9:15. a film of tears would cover my eyes as i stuck needles into my fingers, music playing in a monotone.

and of course you would walk over, grabbing my hand and pulling the needles out, scolding me for my stupidity.

i could only smile.

just smile.

iii.

you never cared.

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i quit.

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  • krizaa
    November 3

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    this is a made-up scenario

    and normally people makeup happy times. only u would make up stuff that hurts.


  • CaliOkie silver member
    November 3

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    I can't get over the feeling that I have read this before. For some reason I didn't leave a comment, which is very unusual as I am known for my longwindedness.

    I liked it then, and I like it now.

    Garrison


  • myron silver member
    August 24

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    excellent detail

    This prose poem is full of excellent detail. It is direct and evocative in its expressions.

    you would always come home late in my head. probably 9:15. a film of tears would cover my eyes as i stuck needles into my fingers, music playing in a monotone.


    I love the direct language and the well-written sentences. There are emotions lurking behind every image and that's a wonderful thing for a writer to achieve.

    best wishes,
    Myron.


  • Rainbowgasm
    August 11

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    When you said that you quit,
    I was worried.
    I thought you were meaning that you were going to quit on life. Then I was reading some of the other comments and I read one of yours: "i'm just done with her."
    You have no idea how proud I am of you.
    You are strong[r].
    You will survive[or].

    Much love ♥

    -Rainbow.


    PS: This is Mary or Princessofshadows

  • ShellyoConnor
    August 10

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    Awh I like this
    This is why you're a favourite,
    To me your writing is magnificent, because it is.

    This is simple but complicated,
    Well done hun,
    I feel your pain

    Shelly
    x


  • scenario five
    August 10

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    D:

    sadness.

    I dont really know what to say to this.
    other than it was brilliant.

    great job. : D

    -jenn


  • apples fell
    August 10

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    If this is you empty, than I am jealous.
    I simply loved this and all its moments
    make it snap into place, like building blocks.
    God, you are a good writer. And no, you don't
    quit, well, at least this writing thing you
    don't.

    ;


    • Space Invaders
      August 10

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      C: thanks.
      i can't quit writing. i tried and i almost went nuts.

      i'm just done with her.

      C: thanks for the support.

      • apples fell
        August 10
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        I am glad you have found some peace in the end, from separating yourself from a hurtful situation...Sometimes we just have to do these things to better ourselves. You are most welcome. I enjoy your writing so if you were quitting that, I would be quite sad. Glad to see that is not the case.
  • kibo no hikari
    August 9
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    This is so sad. And expressive. And.. it shows so much emptiness


    • Space Invaders
      August 9
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      thanks.

      i am empty, but that sounds rather cliche. X3

      thanks for your comments.
      they really mean a lot.
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