--- for Rob Ganson and all the rest
of the word slingers trying
to make a difference
Today I rant with the throat of a half dead monk,
nodules blistered, raw fingernails clinging
to the severed head of poetics.
Bah! What bastardization and inhuman vomit
hath come forth to bleed upon this tapestry
of once green fronded thread?
What malfunctioning robotosized sphrinx mind
of injustice has been allowed to overwhelm
the vast mystery of the Universe?
Oil merchant, tyrannical politic of systematic souls
and mercantile prostitutes who wander
in, through and out television screens,
fornicate with numb minded gypsies
who have forgotten the beauty contained
within their wild rudimentary violins.
Pygmy eyed raconteurs who only speak with tongues
anointed by stale pennies, while my own voice,
my own boxing glove of flowers is cast aside
behind the wretched walls of non atmospheric
consumerism.
And as poet Ganson opens up his battered lungs
and wide mouthed rails into the spacious sky
of Wisconsin, you simply sit there in your
opulent armchair, your ears plugged up
with the mothballs of your own corpulent
ignorance.
Oh I hereby denounce your siliconed spectre
of electronic vaults, I spit cherry blossoms
upon your cabinet tables, your oval office fortress
and the pus infested monarchy that threatens
the breathing air of my grandchildren.
My oratory, though weakened with age,
marches forward, waits to be bludgeoned
by the insipid devourer of all that is humane.
BUT YOU WILL NOT SILENCE ME!!!
I stand upon the graves of Whitman and Ginsberg,
ride Kerouac’s open road, breathe with the fire
of Dylan’s all consuming furnace
and HOWL in heartfelt compassion
for all the orphans
wandering upon this combustible planet.
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...and what a rant !
What can one add...each line is worthy of a paragraph, or a book of dialogue; but you your passionate diatribe brings it all into focus!
I especially loved the line:
"I spit cherry blossoms
upon your cabinet tables"
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I loved this Marc. Two thumbs way up and 3 happy face dudes to boot! Loved the references to the beat poets too.
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nice... definitely must read it again n again to let it all sink in... thanks for sharing n the in your face honesty... sure is hard to find these days...
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http://allpoetry.com/list/show/55499
This piece was chosen for my list.
It's my idea of a gold trophy.
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If this is the one you wanted me to see,
then I already have. My comment clearly
didn't do it justice though as this really
truly is remarkable stuff.
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The Beats would be proud
There's no other way to say it: I loved this. The title grabbed me and drew me in, and the rest of the poem kept me enthralled. You had extremely strong, interesting imagery from "raw fingernails clinging/ to the severed head of poetics" to "spit[ting] cherry blossoms/ upon your cabinet tables." The images were very powerful and totally backed up the very poetic, eloquent outrage you expressed.
As I was reading this through, I was thinking of how Ginsberg-esque this was, so I was extra happy to read the little homage to the Beats at the end.
I only have a couple very minor criticisms. First, the use of "hath" in line 5 doesn't seem to match with the tone of the poem. Your diction was very modern and forceful, and hath just seems antiquated. I think 'has' would work just as well, if not better, here.
My other point is even more minor, but I don't feel that "But you will not silence me" needs to be isolated and in all caps. The caps-lock lettering drew my eye away from the strong phrasing and imagery of the previous stanza much more quickly than I'd like. I think you'd make just as strong a statement without using all caps.
Other than those minor quibbles, I really loved this. Excellent poem with an excellent message.
-CJ
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Thank you for reading and responding . . . your minor criticisms are well both meaning and perhaps justified . . . the"hath" just popped in there while I was scribbling the thing down as fast as I could . . . The capitalization is something that I do from time to time to emphasis how it would be read at a reading, not necessary on the printed page really . . . I will take your thoughtfulness into consideration . . .
peace,
Marc
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Dammmnnn...You've howled one helluva piece, Marc. Right on, my Brother. You keep beatin' those drums, my Friend. 
Swan
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It's all your fault Swan!!!!!! Bless you . . .
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Happy to oblige ya, Scribe. Anytime.
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love ya sis . . .
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YES!
Absolutely, positively, Fabulous!
So strong and powerful! So utterly timely and poignant!I applaud your courage and openly give you a standing ovation for this piece.
I realize who your targeted audience is...but wonder...others who may be reading this piece, may not understand due to the highly educated verbiage. But as for me....I am in your corner! Please feel free to return the favor. Thank you for the opportunity to read and respond to such a great piece.Keep shouting from the rooftops! Someone may just hear you and respond!
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Crikey, this is so good. I think if everyone could read both yours and Rob's words, when you write about the things you are clearly so passionate about, AND take them on board, the world would be a FAR better place.
The poem is dripping with veracity and truth and there is no doubt you mean every single word - you should be shouting it from rooftops.
Particularly loved the "Oh I hereby denouce" stanza.
This is cracking poetry
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Allyce . . . thanks for the positive response. Just as a side note, I've kinda dropped out of the poetry scene up here in Vancouver, haven't done a reading in about a year . . . but I would love to read with Rob, I think it would be the highlight of my creative life . . . Of course we might get arrested LOL . . .
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Even I'd get arrested, for the good it'd do
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This burns like a great stiff bourbon. I was just saying the other day how your poetry has so much soul and a burning knowledge of Ginsberg, and yes, here it is, that feeling brought forth once again in absolute demolition and beauty. I loved that "I hereby denounce" stanza, that was simply brilliant. And then that ending, well, what needs to be said really when the orphans scream so much through it all. Your poem has legs marc and it is truly alive.
Great work. Seriously.
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Re: Love Song to the Pentagon
WOWY! A very strong indictment of our military, our government ,our TV journalists, our way of life, our inhuman morality and all that has become Modern America couch potato-hood!!! I like this statement -- it does ring with the voices of dead poets that you mentioned. I'm proud of you for speaking out so strongly! Very well done poetic rant -- with real feeling and emotion behind it! KEEP UP YOUR SHOUTING!
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This sings with the voices of the poets of the ages! Dylan, Whitman and all would be quite pleased!
Wonderfully done!
Marianne
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Wow!
Thank you, from one loud orphan.
I still want to write like you when I grow up. These long, precise, important lines. The second time, I read it aloud!
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You are most welcome and thank you for the desire to express myself raw . . . I've been stifled of late with the age old poetry blues, needed to burst forward somehow and reading you was just the catalyst I needed . . .
thanks bro,
Marc
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Hell Yeah
Marc this is raw real and so damn good to hear
Rob's gonna love this
this had the feel of Howl
only Ginsberg would see this as brevity
but he would love it too
peace Muddy
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Thanks Muddy . . . was reading Rob today and he always seems to draw a wild response from me . . . This piece just fell real fast unto the paper and I didn't want to change anything, so I posted it as is.
Marc
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Oh yeah poet...
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Just awesome.
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