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Just Breathe..

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Has a man ever asked you to dance?
Take my hand,  just dance with me
Just let our bodies move into the night
Close your eyes ~ my heart is beating


J u s t    b r e a t h e . .

Has a man ever showed you the universe?  
Hold on, just fly with me
Just let me carry you into my dreams
Open your eyes ~ my soul is glowing


J u s t   b r e a t h e . .

Has a man ever held you in the rain?
Let the drops fall ~ Just kiss me
Just let the storm ignite the passions within
Close your eyes ~ my body is burning


J u s t   b r e a t h e . .


Has a man ever loved you?
Take what is yours ~ Just take me
Let our dreams come true
Now open your eyes ~ and just let it be


You haven’t breathed

until.. you’ve breathed with me

 

J u s t   B r e a t h e . .

 

 

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  • fool no1
    November 16
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    Such wonderful imagery and feelings here in this truly lovely piece...mal


  • Susan John Francis
    October 30

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    The air filled with the pictures u created here, as I was reading this piece, A soul mate hard to find. A perfect right , Just Breath...
  • mz.butter gold member
    October 28
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    A true love story


  • Mia2
    October 27
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    Lovely is; This new breath of air that has filled your sails.
  • michaeline
    October 26

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    You sound like a true romantic.Dreams are only as real as you can let them be.They do help I think in steering you in the right direction in what you are looking for.Having dreams to live for is a wonderful thing as long as it has a realistic base.I think you need to elaborate on the wish for this person to be who you have dreamed and not on who you envisioned or thought because you may never know who could walk in to your life and change it forever.

    . Rewarded 8


  • peregrin
    October 15
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    This is so pretty, oh my god, I love it.
    Great work!
    This write is fantastic!!!


  • backtoeden silver member
    October 12
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    This is beautiful. I love your form in this piece, including the imagery and emotions. Great Job!!!


  • Manicmuze
    October 12

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    very romantic... soothing and soft and caressing. i think this is beautiful.
    nicely done,
    ~ wendy

  • Patpowersnoshoepoet
    October 9
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    Awesome work of poetry. So descriptive vivid and quite the work! THANKS!!


  • rhondasail
    September 10

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    "...my heart is beating
    ...my soul is glowing
    ...my body is burning
    ...just let it be

    J u s t B r e a t h e . ."

    Soulful write that shows the importance of our breath...how it inspires and gives life to our being and when shared brings such love. Well done. Peace, Rhonda


  • Hikari Lady
    September 3

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    This was breath caughting and I chocked, truely I should feel passionated and happy when reading such poem, but this one just made me sad, because of what I am going through.
    It's beautiful though, so full of passiona nd love and desire, gives a warm feeling.


  • Dalaney gold member
    August 31

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    i find the best poetry to read when I find myself stumbling through this place....can I breathe now?

    Love, Lane


  • Grunts Girl
    August 23
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    rather song like
    enjoyed

  • Angelflower Greeters member
    August 22

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    How beautiful!! Oh what woman would not want a man o say such wonderful things to her! lol. you did such a wonderful job with this!! it's so soft and just flows with beauty.. I really loved this.. thank you very much for sharing something so heartfelt and peaceful..


    Angel

  • xXDarkChildXx
    August 21

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    Such a lovely poem, full of love, and touching moments. It paints a picture in my eyes. I love the rain, something that really caught me hehe I love the format too. =D really cool. Lovely job. Keep on writing.


  • jcat gold member
    August 12

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    Oh MY!!! I think I just lost my heart....... This was beyond words and what every woman longs to hear..... SIGH........Just beautiful!!!!


  • sandybeaches gold member
    August 12
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    This is beautiful. So nice to see this different mood of poetry from you1 ***Pam***


  • DreamCatcher6
    August 12

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    breathtaking

    WOW..I love it especially the last part" You haven’t breathed until you’ve breathed with me" very powerful and gentle same time. Yet another wonderful piece.I can read and feel the hope and the light in this one. You are gifted my friend.

  • albymyheart gold member
    August 12

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    A soft and beautiful poetic display of love

    This poem is distinctly different from your other writes and what a wonderful piece it is. The sentiments are penned by a hand who knows loves magic, its sensual bond and its magestic devotion. There is an eloquant longing feeling mixed with desire throughout. "Take what is yours ~ Just take me" such simple words yet so sacrificial and pure, very nice.
    "Now open your eyes ~ and just let it be" just succumb to what you know your heart desires...again simple yet pure thoughts. "Just transparent" (like you admit in your author's notes) is just a divine write.

    Each new stanza, separated with the words "Just breath" (which would be better written as "Just breathe") literally draws us to take that next breath, creating a unique interaction between the reader and the poem. So the form is very cleverly thought out.

    Your end lines are very strong and finish the poem nicely. Superb write my friend...alby

  • Aisades gold member
    August 12

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    Beautiful..

    This is utterly .. .breathtaking. It is so romantic, sweet, gentle and yet strong, masculine and arousing. It just inhales, breathes in itself...and leaves me breathless.

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