eyes
too long unseen
meet, we drown
between each other
every past misguided
fear, stripped at last, falls known
shared within
this stare
dreams made
real as lips kiss
promise, sealed
in this, my first
three seconds with you
Author notes
Contest - use line 'three seconds with you'
A contest entry
- 3 seconds with you by atyla.
300 points, ended September 13, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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What a lovely 3 seconds they sound like!! The forgetting of the past and joining anew!
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Oooooooh.
Very good. I like this a lot you captured the spontanius nature of love at first sight great job1 Best of luck -
Beautiful
I always knew you had talent. Atta girl
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Wow... you need to share your poetry more often... what a beautifully compact and emotional write. Bravo!
Ken
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Good job!
By George,
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The end is excellent, beautiful finish.
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lovely
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Aww, this is beautiufl hun! I love how you have tied it all together. Very sweet and romantic. Best of luck!♥
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*jelly*
... and thank you. X
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That ending hits hard for me...As I have felt that way many times. It is something that I do not always know I have missed, until, it is too late. For some reason I want to be those eyes, and certainly, you know what poetry does to me. I cry holidays on most evenings and I sleep with the chemical of words on my collar. Thank you for this piece of writing. I very much enjoyed it love. Please, post more. I insist.
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Thank you for your gorgeous comment.
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You are quite welcome.
I always look forward to new works
from you.
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