For what seems so long ago, I was a little girl
a princess of nature, who dreamt the impossible.
Raced many sunsets on invisible horses and
spoke to fairies, where we often would meet
between the dripping ferns and the night crawlers.
~ A life of paradise ~
Before they were prepared, I became a lady of all trades;
challenging every challenge, I embraced that uninspiring
realm of the "grown ups."
Treasures, I securely left behind;
uncertain when the opportunity would
arise for recovery. This horizon I now knew
to be home; quickly became a place of uncertainty.
Forcefully, I chose to break the one stallion in life
and solemnly became a wife, attempting to
paint her own canvas in life. Many tries later,
I realized the paint was inferior. Cooperation
and commands failed. It refused to blend in.
To the naked eye, the canvas appeared
beautifully maintained. Oh, how this horizon
became my silent prison...
Breaking free took a terrible toll on me,
nearly all my feathers, especially those
for flight, were ripped out.
With little to no wings and no nest,
I faced the nights alone fighting off
the scavengers and predators who could smell
my weakness while my horizon slowly drowned in tears.
My strength returned in time as my flight feathers grew,
for I'll never forget the dawn of my resurrection as I
spread new wings. In competition with the scarlet sky,
a phoenix reborn.
Witnesses to this very day, recalls the stillness
of that morning, as I screeched;
"I AM ALIVE! I AM FREE!"
I claimed the sun as mine that day as I soared into the sky,
intimately nose diving straight into the suns rays
as it rose in welcoming me with its loving light.
Allowing gravity to capture me as I raced with the wind;
my eyes narrowed while I approached the distant hills,
blinking from the intense beauty.
My heart melted from absolute joy while my
horizon sparkled with undiscovered potential.
(c) 08-13-08 @ 00:07
Author notes
Thank you Amera, Allan and CricketJeff for hosting this lovely contest and including me. It was a real treat indeed. 
She-ra
A contest entry
- Sorry: Invitation Only by Amera.
8000 points, ended August 20, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is one of those poems that everyone can relate which, having their wings clipped, being caged. And, you've written in such a vivid way, it's truly great.. G'luck.
Sailor Ptolema
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To the naked eye, the canvas appeared
beautifully maintained. Oh, how this horizon
became my silent prison...
Breaking free took a terrible toll on me,
nearly all my feathers, especially those
for flight, were ripped out.
I give high marks for any poem that gives me a passionate feeling that is personal to the author. This one is exceptional in that regard.
This is an unbelievably frank and revealing study of the American Dream. It is clever, descriptive, expressive and original. I think the ending is a little over the top, but, since it was the perspective of the author and not an unemotional narrator, it can be taken with a grain of salt.
Thank you for this most worthy entry into our contest and thanks for putting the judges in the proper order.
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< Sorry if I insulted you.
But I did find the imageries, to be frank, rather trite. I assumed the innitial comment was self-explanatory. I apologize for not writing an essay of critique for your poem is unnecessarily long. And yes, as you say, I am new here. And thank you for the warm welcome.
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I love the journey you took us on here... from innocence to being jaded, to once again embracing life as a journey with bright horizons! I think everyone will be able to relate to this as we have all been through similar journey's in our lives.
Lovely write!
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*Smiles @ you* Thank you Kiwi babe -- your kind comment is much appreciated. I'm honored you enjoyed this piece. It was a real treat to be a part of this and to present this piece in this contest. Hope to see more of you around these parts soon.
Have a beautiful day,
She-ra
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Wow nicely done
Again you give us reason to think. Reading your works always thrill me you have honed your craft to a fine edge. Your heart bleeds through your words and paints beauty on a blank canvas. I must say I've come to expect nothing less from you. Always getting my monies worth. Again BRAVO to you, Boog
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Thank you Boogie for your sweet comment. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Your comments mean a lot to me.
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I liked this. A nice tale of rebirth, full of imagery. Lines 26-29 were especially well done. Nice flow to it as well.
Good luck!
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Spankya spankya Kraazk. Hope to see ya around more.
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No worries, y'all are stuck with me.
Or.. maybe you should worry?
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Caught my eye...
and a bite size chunk of my heart also, xcellent write with great imaginative landscapes, I've been locked in a few cages of the mind so I can relate to this, words that leapt at me from my own personal prisons; "Awakening" "Revelation" "Expanding Horizons"
yes, they take thier tole allright, but freedom you can't put a price on, it's worth every cent...
good
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Nice to see you again. Glad you enjoyed this piece. Thank you for your kindness hun.
She-ra
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ah the dreams we race when we are children, that is ghood, i wish we could move those dreams along into aduthood but alas we never seem to do that. free - we are all free to a degree but then we start thinking and lose the thread but we need to think to stay free - a paradox sadly, still we can move along the smiles and laugh our existence into the here and now, some of us will be thought of in time as revolutionaies and others will fall into time's ways it mattetrs not which side we are on as long as we tried
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... that's something that is rarely known without being taught one way or another --- Thanks so much for reading and commenting. I've truly enjoyed your comment. Hope to see you around more.
Have a pleasant day,
She-ra
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Wow this is phenomenal!
I can well relate to this, as it is exactly what I went through and which has left me a single mother raising my daughter alone since she was just 7 (she is 18 now).
This is a masterpiece of factual heart rending poetic perfection, and so written from your heart and soul, and I empathize with you all the way on this.
Brilliant and fantastic work, gripping and captivating all the way through well penned and poetically graphic fine sculpting in poetic perfection and also of vital poetic importance. Send this to the single parent publications and groups it will inspire many to soldier on.
You are amazing. Well done, bravo, love it!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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Kazzy I can't tell you how much your comments mean to me. Since the beginning of my arrival to AP you and I have been on the same page, one way or another. Or so it seems. Thank you for the encouragement and love. You are a blessing.
Keep smiling --- I hear it in your voice,
She-ra
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I knew I wouldn’t be disappointed when you agreed to be in our contest. I was captivated with your feeling of life and growing up. Trading your “princessdom” of “between the dripping ferns and the night crawlers” for the uncertainty of adulthood is a feeling I share with you. This poem is unique and wonderful for that reason; I as the reader put myself into the poem as I saw myself in every aspect. I even felt the marriage part as I almost became a bride myself. Bravo!
Love,
Amera♥
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I had hoped you would find yourself in relation to this poem -- any warrior princess would. Have fun judging and hurry up and come back to us!
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This is great poerty. the joy the and the gratitude of life. The phonex is a wonderful metaphor for rising from the ashes. Love it. Well done.
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Thank you Marilyn for your kindness. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Hope to see you around more often.
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I really liked this.. The imagery was really vivid and detailed..And the emotion in this write was really heartfelt..This was a really beautiful write.. I really enjoyed reading this.. thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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Thank you Angelflower for your kindness. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece.
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This is wonderfully done.
Thanks so much for sharing.
Loved it honey
and you
Good luck in the contest
Passions
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Thanks Passions!
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Interesting write. It's amazing how knowledge is a double edged sword. It fills that curious void of 'more' but leaves you unhappy and jaded in the end. Loved this. Cheers and good luck in the contest!
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Thank you Seven, I'm glad you enjoyed. Hope to see you around more often.
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