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My jailer

 

I heard the music playing in my mind

While every dream became a waterfall

I wondered at the magic I would find

If I should face my fears and heed the call

 

A silver light was lit so I could see

A perfect vision dressed in flowing veil

The magic in her words infected me

I have to hold the beauty by the tail

 

Her siren song has swept away my heart

I yearn for my captivity to start

 

 

 

Author notes

It's a curtal Shakesperian sonnet I guess

artwork entitled Siren of the Falls by C Marie

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  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    August 30

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    Good take on the picture prompt. I think you got a good impression from the picture, still using the lore of the siren. Thank you for entering and good luck. Storm

  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 14

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    Pretty! She does seem enchanting.. as if she would draw you to her, to be lost within her world willingly!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 14
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    Oh kaaaaayyy... you're writing a poem to/about a mermaid... I can relate to that!



  • Thomas Scott gold member
    August 13
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    Boffo!

    Great read with a powerful closing.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 13

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    Well indeed as always
    seems to spark it up.

    Great job and good luck to
    you in the contest

    Love
    Passions


  • balenciaga
    August 13

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    Pretty sonnet . I've never thought a sonnet could be 'pretty' per say; LOL but you've made it so . I think you've captured the melodic siren song with this 'n . .

    ~Meg

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  • Sylvyrwyng silver member
    August 13

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    I like this... the visuals are immensely seductive in their simplicity and the pic actually seduces the reader into the deeper aspects of the writer's desire and need to write.

  • Solidified
    August 13

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    Pretty images, smooth flow. The last two lines of the first stanza are what kept me interested in the poem, reminds me of my own desire to face my fears. Nicely put.

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