She’s my vicious cycle of abuse
the Bi-Polar girl of my eye
too much makeup, acting loose
endless heart aches make me cry.
Her love for me so pure
My heart and soul reels
but when her manic side calls
it's slutty clothes and heels.
When I’m not at beck and call
with her loose side on the rise
foundation of love will fall
into this relationships demise.
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6. http://allpoetry.com/poem/4490303
By aprilnadeau
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Bipolar can be hard to be arround even if you do accept that the person has issues. thank you for entering my contest. Please make sure you follow my rules ok?
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I like this. I haven't seen too many good poems on bi-polar disorder, but I definitely enjoyed this. Great take on the prompt and wonderful flow.
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I don't turn slutty; I go from extremely happy and content to depressed, suicidal and murderously angry. Vicious and hurtful. I feel it coming and it's like a locomotive I can't stop. The nice me gets out of the way to let the train take over. Even on meds I'm out of control. Then trying to pick up the pieces ... unable to undo the harm or take back vicious words. Your last stanza seems apt though. Thank you very much for the entry.
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Amusing and sad.
Sounds as if you've had personal experience with a bi-polar person. Not much fun. Right on point. I like your rhyme scheme and rhythmic flow. You chose my prompt and I enjoy your take on it. The title is apt, as the first story to highlight the symptoms of manic depressive illness, was your paraphrased title. A very good job. Return the favor?
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that sounds rough. Bi-polar runs my family. It is a strange illness.
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