"osculating universe of dreams"
Laying down, staring at the evening sun not being able to break through the clouds
I remembered when they told us that the sky was the limit
but nowadays, the sky isn't really that far away, is it?
with out jets and rockets we only have a short time to go
does that mean opportunity really isn't there anymore?
and limits are getting closer and closer to smashing down on our heads?
"well, maybe space is the limit. Its infinite, you know. always expanding"
but, my friend... space is a vacuum
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Chaos
A contest entry
- OPTIONS III- GOLD - SILVER - BRONZE FOR EACH - need 1 more to close by Florida Sunshine.
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I love the concept of this poem it is very thought provoking, it made me think and I agree with it, beautiful job, please keep writing...
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hmmm. thought provoking indeed. i like the image of the sky being not so far away, but it also give me a bitter taste in my mouth. this whole poem does actually. you insinuate hope, after being told you cant, only to cut it short.
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Good Job!
Line 2 and 3 are wonderful, is the sky the limit ?
Time and education has changed our concepts about tne world and space. good reference to space and infinity-purhaps these ideas could be enlarged
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oooohhhhhh.... shame on you..... but oh so true. Space is a vaccum. Very interesting thought here. Very creative. Very deep here. I did however have to smile by the way you wrote it. Thanks for sharing this wonderful little write. I did enjoy reading it. I can see why you won some trophies with this little poem. Definitely worth it.
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This little ditty ... certainly made me smile. Full of thoughts... questions posed by some... answers given by others. Profound and deep because it makes you think.
Thanks so much for entering, I did enjoy reading and reviewing your work.
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine B -
I fully Agree!
You have penned some profound and true words here, I agree with all you say. Great philosophical piece of poetic perfection, setting free the freedom of speech, expressing what is thought as opposed to what might be expected! Bravo for that!
Love the bit which goes:
""well, maybe space is the limit. Its infinite, you know. always expanding"
but, my friend... space is a vacuum"
How darned true that is.
I work as a remote viewer so I can say that there is more out there than what most people could envisage, seems you are a deep thinker and that is good.
Bravo, love this poem its bang on beam, write on, well done!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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