In the dead of night
The smell of blood fills the air.
As I catch my first prey of the night.
His neck is tender
but tastes so good.
The unknown daughter of Dracula and Darla
I am a pureblood vampiress
Taught to hunt and kill unsuspecting humans.
I wander the streets in search of tasty blood.
At dawn I return to my crypt.
But I shall awake again
in the dead of night.
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Comments
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A vampire write!
I like vampires. Such wholesome creatures that truly make life much more interesting.
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Thank you for your entry
Definitely in the spirit of the holiday. The unknown daughter of Dracula and Darla huh, a note of mystery in this. I like your closing line as well. Leaves something to the unknown. Good job with the formatting.
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Happy Halloween and God Bless
Tammy
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i like this poem! i like how you wrote it in the first person perspective of the vapiress and i also like how you mention the vampiress as the "unkown daughter of Dracula and Darla" Dracula being a well-known vampire so you know it is about vampiress before it says so. my only complaint is that the second "night" in the poem doesn't sound quite right...overall, great!
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sent shivers tingling down my spine
nicely done ; best wishes in the contest also 
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I don't know much about vampires but it is a truly inspiring poem
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very sexy
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Who is darla? I hate to say it, but I guess I am not up with the world of vampires not to know.
It's a nice vampire poem. Definitely captures the dark mood and evil of the night creature. I would have liked a little more detail. But it has a scary feel to it. I wonder what this would've been like if you'd held off on saying you are a vampire? Let the reader guess, or at least didn't reveal it til the last line? Of course, I think its pretty obvious from the way the poem is written.
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im picky about vampire poems
for me its hard to write something that you are not, for me this poem would of related better if you talked about the sensation of the kill not trying to overdo it by kinda doing an over view, also i would of recommended not telling the reader your a vampire till the end.
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Omg..scary and bloody
liked it a lot but wonder what do you mean by "pure blood"..
By the way,I'm from Romania,Dracula's home *evil*
Anan.
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Hmmm i like this.. this is a short write but its good!!
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I love vampires. Good write and good luck!
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They Are Here!
What an excellent account of your nightly ventures, I too love the night and often arise to read. You're a magnificent Vampiress. I adored this poem.....novy
So Dark!
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wow
ok that was different but very good indeed. i like the way u use ur words there. bravo. Nick X
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I don't know how many people know, but I absolutely love Vampires, so any Vampiric writing I see, touches me deeply. Very good my friend
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I really like it. It paints a fantastic mental picture and it is quite descriptive. Have you, per chance, read Twilight? Just wondering if it is as big in the USA as it is in Aussie
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nope i was thinking about reading them i probably will soon
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great usage of words in this poem. liked the way you put everything in such proper description.
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