Hinged, like a door,
I swing to-and-fro to your whims
until out of sight, I bang
into your mind.
Closed, like a door,
I cling to the edge of our mattress
for you have the key to our love
screwed tight.
Open, like a door,
what trampler of love
may peer inside you,
take you, forsake you?
Hinged, like a door,
our love is most vulnerable,
most accessible, most …
impenetrable.
A contest entry
- in the dialect of doors by Nicolette.
1050 points, ended August 27, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow -- open some, for me, too!
WOW! I can "dig" this poem, Lyndon! I do identify with this one! I'm not exactly sure of your meanings, but the images are just great. I like the flow and tightness of your poem! Best of luck, mate, in the contest!
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Thank you Randy.
Well, who ever is sure of the meaning of love!
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this is a well written poem...lyndon and when i read the last stanza...i could not help thinking instead of repeting the hinged door...it would be better said...
this door-
our love... is most vulnerable,
most accessible, most …
impenetrable.
love the poem though
mal
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Loved the opening stanza - what a powerful way to open this poem with and grab the reader's attention, Ron. Wonderful use of poetic device here and such vivid images. This poem is real, it is subtely sensual, it is loving. I so enjoyed reading this poem about mature love, love that keeps out the cold, that that encloses. Wonderful poetry. Thank you for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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Dear Nicolette
It is kind of you to provide me with your kind of comment and I'm sorry I do not always return in kind. 
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Just when
I had this 'give up feeling', you surprise with the final stanza, and I can once again relax!! Lovely, meaningful and it does awake that feeling of being human. Frans
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Poetry with an open and shut case..love is like that, although I would prefer ajar. Excellent!
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A beautiful write. Very nice simile. Lovely depth of feeling. Good imagery, flow and tone. You express your love beautifully in this piece. Excellent closing lines. Well penned and much enjoyed. Best wishes in the contest.
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It is lovely to be visited by you Shelley.
Thank you for the bunnies and for admiring the poem.
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