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between the two of us

i am the violent crest of suicide,
the sharpened edges of the knife,
the street below the bridge

i am the overbearing
undertaking
the unthinkable
unexplainable
i am the secret nobody knows
i am the shadow that goes where you go

i miss the rain
the way it dripped across your face
i miss the sun
the way it shone
in just the right place on your mattress
just between the two of us

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  • Salt Therapy silver member
    August 22

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    Fuck! Excuse my language, this is amazing! I am the violent crest of suicide... i am the street below the bridge... i am the shadow that goes where you go... mattress... two of us... wow. this is very very touching.

  • Undying-Heartbeat
    August 22
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    Kudos! This is awesome...amazing...brillant!! I love the topic. Impressive work and greatness!!


  • midnight vampiress
    August 22
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    wow. this is simply amazing. such a strong piece. i love the last stanza, it simply blows my mind.


  • hindsight20-20
    August 22

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    Wow
    isn't a strong enough word.
    Neither is amazing
    or extraordinary.


    I utterly loved it.
    school us more.

    -steph


  • yourbrokenrainbowxx
    August 22

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    wow I think this is amazing, very good poem! I love it <3 [: Keep up the great work, you're a very good poet! ;]

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