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Swallowed

Little man, art thou swallowed
by thine interpupillary limitations...
unable to see
that the sky covers thee
as well as me?

Fine fellow,
spread thy griffin's wings
and grasp the enemy
with grand talons,
strong.

Be not the grig
thou doth see
within thy mirror,
for life holds vaulted stature
for thee...

if only thou hast faith
and are not swallowed
by thy shame.

Author notes

lol... I wrote this poem for a strange contest and the poem fit the contest, but makes no sense otherwise, so oh my gosh! The contest host deleted the contest! Probably read my poem and croaked.

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  • Ellis gold member
    November 17
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    Made me croak, also
    Watched my 5th life go
    Have 4 more
    But before
    I lose another, I say: NO!

    Tiki Cat
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    "Too Good For Humans"


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    September 2

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    Bandits United!

    This mysteriously makes sense to me. I love the content, the choice of words, & the impact this has on the senses! Of course I'm going to have to look up the word grig [have a sense of what it means from its placement & context]! I like poems that give a strong visual [which this does] & makes you think! I like your sense of humor! Surely you'd have won a trophy for this! Here: I'm a Bible Scholar [student] & I love the way you start this out:

    Little man, art thou swallowed
    by thine interpupillary [is this an original word? it's great!] limitations...
    unable to see
    that the sky covers thee
    as well as me?

    & then how you tie the poem up nicely:

    Be not the grig
    thou doth see
    within thy mirror,
    for life holds vaulted stature
    for thee...

    if only thou hast faith
    and are not swallowed
    by thy shame.

    I 'see' Biblical correlations to this. 'For now we see as in a glass darkly'[paraphrase], & shame comes through the guilt of knowing one has transgressed the law! Bravo for this!


    Jokes on me! Grig is not what I thought it was! Learned a new word today. Thanks!



  • ian sawicki
    August 30
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  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    August 28

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    excellent~

    Very different for sure sis
    I am sure they didn't read your poem and croaked LOL
    Your so silly but love ya loads anyway
    Loved this too
    Hugs
    Your sis
    Susan~~~


  • slick99
    August 26

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    this is good *hugs* have a nice day Melodies, -slick99

  • Haiku-bless-you silver member
    August 25

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    How completely creative, a bit like looking at a Salvore Dali painting, you just don't know what is going to hop out at you! Interesting read for sure!

    Dennis


  • PhantomsAngel87 Greeters member
    August 25

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    You are amazing and adorable

    ♥
    Stay safe
    Love to you
    ~Manda


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 25

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    "Little man, art thou swallowed
    by thine interpupillary limitations..."

    You had me from "Hello" with this one, Marilynn.


    • Melodies silver member
      August 25
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      Thank you, Mairi... I wrote this strange poem for an even stranger contest and THEN the host deleted the contest! SHEEEESH!

  • Pensitivity
    August 24

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    Wow! Sweet take on the prompt. Brilliant use of "The Olden" day talk, lol. Gripping title. Best of luck in the contest-- I just know that you'll win gold! And if my intuition is wrong.. Someone's been messing with the facts!

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