nothing but another wound
my thigh begins to ache
one more cut?
another slice?
the carving of your name?
so what...
just another scar, to add to my canvas.
a pain increase?
just one more release...
the sparkling drips?
my blade slips...
dripping
d
o
w
n
my leg
relaxation...
at least
i'm calm
my breathing slows
my eyes close
...
too bad it wasnt deep enough.
now to cover them up...
go back to this hell,
to be the shit friend
to having to lie, about what i just did.
don't worry...
its just another day
in this worthless f*cking life!
Author notes
shit poem... i'm a shit friend... it had no rhyme... no flow... no nothing....
but it stopped me cutting. does that count for something???
Please tell me what you think
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yes it counts...and poetry don't always have to rhyme. i don't think like anything i write rhymes but i do it for me and tahts what counts. so if it stopped you then it counts.
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thanks you! =]
ur right!
take care
luv HB
xoxo
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CANT POETRY FIND YOU AMEANING 'IN THIS WORTHLESS FU*KING LIFE'
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yea i guess so....
if it wasnt for thing sbeing so screwed up, i wouldnt have hardly any of the poems i've written
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great poem.
it captured your emotions, sometimes too much structure can make the poem a bit awkward.
and if it stopped you cutting, then its a great poem in itsself..
x.x.x.
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You say twas shit but I found it wasn't. It actually caught my attention and these days I've become more critical of poems, so that means it's pretty snazzy =D it's not overflowing with techniques, but that suits it excellently. A magnificent intertwining of words done with great precision. =D
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This is NOT a shit write and you AREN'T a shit friend. You are a beautiful, caring and special person. I'm so glad that it stopped you cutting. If writting helps you to STOP then keep writting my beautiful daughter Love you heaps xxxxoooo 
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Yeah... This poem does count... for alot of things.
It counts for the fact the it stopped you for cutting, and for the fact that you actually wrote about how you felt at the time.
In your authors notes, you have put yourself down so much. It's a good write, believe me!
"now to cover them up...
go back to this hell,
to be the shit friend
to having to lie, about what i just did." << I like this part.
It's a great write, keep it up.
xXx
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