I feel the hands of despair choking me
While trying to run from feelings I can’t confront
Feeling ripped apart by some unknown force
And trying not to hate myself
Though I know things will turn out all right
I can’t help the aching in my heart
That I place there with worries and fear
And the headaches that remind me of all the bad
Caught in the undertow of unsure, unhappy, and unwilling
I know that being scared will not make life any easier
But being worried is helplessly addictive
And a habit that is very hard to shake
So I hide from the thought of change
Or cringe at the thought of being judge
And pour a stream from my eyes
When I think I’m being hated
I have no idea of what to do
I only want to curl up into a ball
And disappear from the hurt of reality
So here I am just fading away from it all
Please tell me what you think
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i really liked it. it holds a lot of feelings that most people can relate too. keep up the good work.
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Strong write and very sad. I liked the first and last stanzas. You also expressed your feelings well. Keep writing. Xds-gX
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Not bad.
I can relate but unfortunately, at 40 must deal with it all. There are usually two choices;; F Everything And Run or Face Everything And Recover. (FEAR)
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Oh I do feel the emotion in this little piece. It is an excellent write. Good choice of words and imagery going on here. Good job
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oh yeah, this too
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woah, or wow, wisdom beyond your years, insight too, the third stanza, intense, the second line of the first two stanzas, smart, insightful, and relatable, and thank you
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I think its great...I really enjoyed the part about curling up into a ball,and dissapear from the hurt of reality!!I would love to do that.
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Ha! Such emotions that I know EXACTLY.
I especially like: "So I hide from the thought of change
Or cringe at the thought of being judge
And pour a stream from my eyes
When I think I’m being hated"
So perfectly said. Great write!
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Wow you expressed your feelings well.
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I agree with what some one said down there. We shouldn't just compliment you on how you write just because of your age.
However, you could of been a billion years old and I still would of been absolutely dumbstrucked by this AMAZING piece of work.
Excellent job!!
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Excellent Pen Poet.....Congrats on the spotlight ...
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Thoughtful and sincere. Life is just as worrying later on but there are many good times in between
I'm not going to say I'm surprised that you are only 12 because great language and deep thought are not the preserve of age, Terrific poem well worthy of its spotlight.
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wow that is just awsome the best i have read all night....that is sad though at the same time...no one should ever just fade away from it all... the work is awsome though i cant say how much i enjoyed reading this work of art..wow and you are only 12 that is great...you are a proe already....this is betteer than a lot of poems i have read from the adult writers... keep this up....
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this is my dream for you young poetess,
that you let your heart and all your fears rest.
enjoy being 12 enjoy the carefree times that are ahead.
do not let anyone pressure you to grow up.
12 is a delightful age and you have so many more years to ponder life and grow.
lighten your heart my dear. know that your AP family
will always be near. we all have open hearts and minds
and will listen anytime. so sit back and breath in your
age. know that you are perfection in gods eyes.
rest sweet child take a nice deep breath and rest.
12 can really be the best....
a hug
candice
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i agree with darkmindedfreak: it does not matter if you're 12 or 50, this is very good. you are very talented and have a very, very good mind. i do have some trouble believing you're only twelve, but if you are that makes this all the more amazing. i know when i was twelve i wrote crap.
don't let yourself be deterred by the words of people who have never even met you.
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its a very good emotional write. but people, don't love or hate a poem because of the poet. the two should be separated, and it would be just as good if she was 50.
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holy crap... are you sure your only 12. You are amazing beyond your years. Such a mature sounds and rythme.. amazing
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Most excellent.
"but being worried is helplessly addictive"
So so true.
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A well written piece about the insecurity felt by many young people in todays high pressure world. You have hope for the future, and that is a good foundation to build on. Life wasn't meant to be easy but If you hang in there it will all come out allright in the end.
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I Love The Last Verse, It Ended Very Nicely Well Done =] xx
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nice
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Excellent work for anyone, the fact that you are only 12 years young makes it that much more impressive. Keep up the writing and you will only get better and better!
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that was exceptionally well written, one of the best poems i have read all year!
having read some of your stuff your an incredible poet, very talented, and humble to boot!
In plain terms its not cool to feel such despair and suffering, but i like that you have such hope " Though I know things will turn out all right " not just in this poem though, everyone one i've read so far you always seem to keep your chin up and facing forward with brevity when your feeling down. Its inspiring!
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WOW, if this was written by a 12 year old, I am VERY impressed altogether; have no criticism whatsoever - the feelings brought about in this were more than clear, and well shown rather than told; some strong emotions rose up to the fore. Fantastic!.
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This is really well written. Congrats on having it "in the spotlight" on the front page of this site.
While feeling alone, and feeling that others are judging you is extremely difficult to deal with, it may make it a bit easier if you remember that many others are dealing with the same thing, and you have the ability to go out and dispel those beliefs in others by making sure not to judge others, and to befriend them. They in turn will show you how important and special you are.
Best of luck in life and writing. Growing up is not as easy as some try to make believe. Keep writing, you clearly have talent!!
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This is well penned, emotional and sincere. We all feel this way at times. I'm always here for you if you want to chat. Sometimes it helps to vent with a friend.
Love,
Amera♥
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Wow! What a poem! I like this so much I am going to nominate it for spotlight. Great words.
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