Motionless;
on black pavement,
his chalk traced body
seemed surreal.
Scott's ice cold ghost
stood beside me,
and in a whisper declared;
"I had to have one more..."
There,
he lay wasted
from years of drink.
Thrown afar
after deciding to operate
under the influence.
Friends and family insisted
his navigation skills would be impaired.
But Scott always, (whether sober or stoned)
took control of the situation.
Emily knew better
but they had had words,
and to follow her instruction
would have lead him to
a greater moral defeat.
He should have left the bicycle
where it was because
what he didn't know;
after so long,
the bike chain would snap.
Author notes
LOVE YOU SCOTT!
I wish you a long and healthy life. Don't mind my sick humor. LOL
In a list
A contest entry
- 10001 reasons to write like Scott by MuddyKing.
10001 points, ended September 4, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Tragic...
Niaish. 
I almost wish I hadn't clicked here, but to tell you the truth, it is an excellent thought to keep in the back of the mind - even bikes are hazardous to your health when drinking/drugging. Thank you for sharing your sad, yet thoughtfully told story, I am very sorry for the loss of your friend. May he rest in peace. Take care, Cyn 
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My friend is alive, well, and always talks about drinking in his poetry, and the fictional charcater; "Emily". I was trying to write like he does. LOL Thank God I have lost no one in my family or close to me in this manner. I am sure there are many who have, and my sympathies go to them.
Scott Adelmann is the poet. He is an extraordinary poet and super friend. Thank you for your support this evening!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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This write being truth not fiction about your friend makes it even more powerful about the cause against drinking and driving..(riding a bike) Cleverly written with heartfelt sentiment!
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Renee the line about not listening to Emily was ...well I won't say it but you know
,,,,,,, awesome
loved it
peace and hugs
Muddy
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THIS GAVE ME CHILLS- the photo,
Another write that touches the soul, spine tingling.
Good luck in the contest sweet lady
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oh does Scott write stories with things like this in it...really?...
...PK
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Many loose sight of life as we see it.
the path may be before them, but their head is looking another way.Love not always can be enough to turn their heads and hearts wo where life with a love is with the Man up above....mac
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Top 10 Reasons to join Allpoetry
1-10 inclusive: To read good poetry like this lady serves up!!!
Beautiful Renee!!
Ahem: The last communication we had on here Renee, was your telling me that You "understand me more than I know!" That's almost verbatim.
What I want to know is, just how much it is going to cost
for that to be OUR little secret? LOL
Love the new picture! Love women in hats; and sometimes only hats!
The Spanish don't call them SOMBER-EROS for nothing!LOL
PS> I will never, ever live up to being on your favorites list!LOL
Love you too much,
John-Las Vegas(you know where)
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Fabulous imagery in this, my Sister!! It just grabs you by the throat. The language is simple, yet packs such an impact. So many I have known like this.... I can personally relate, as well! LOL! (my sick humor, too!
) Well penned, indeed! So good to come back (after so long) and read this one from you! Love you!!!
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I feel the pain! great imagery my friend, great story too! much luck to you in the contest.
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WOW...this was haunting Renee! An excellent write for sure. Gosh, you gave me chills..lol Best to you in the contes.
Sam
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