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Dear Diary...It's Friday

Dear Diary,

Something profound happened today that has left a mark
on my heart, let me tell you about it...

There was not much going on today,
it was another day just like the day before.
I was sitting at home doing not much of nothing,
then out of nowhere I heard a soft knock on my door.

I went to the door and opened it,
and there stood an angel in disguise.
There stood a little girl with her parents,
with a dark look of desperation in their eyes.

The young man spoke in whispered tone,
asked for money for food while saying hello.
I was caught off guard feeling put on the spot,
I wasn't sure how to respond, so I simply said no.  

Quickly I closed the door behind me,
a million thoughts rushed into my mind.
Guilt hit then I was consumed with shame,
I didn't understand why I had been so unkind.

There they were standing before me,
humiliated I'm quite sure just by that alone.
Had I lost all my compassion for my fellowman,
because my actions expressed set a disgusting tone.

I still had time to change my response,
I had re-acted, where I wanted now to act.
I went to my kitchen and started to pack a bag,
wanting to do what's right, my first response retract.

I started to fill the bag full with groceries,
as I explained to my family what was wrong.
They all wanted to help, so we filled the bag fuller,
out the front doorI went to find them, it hadn't been long.

It wasn't hard, I spotted them quick,
they were not far from where I just came.
I yelled once for them and they turned to look,
I went running to them, bag in hand tried to explain.

It wasn't them I didn't want to help,
it was me who reacted out of sheer fear.
Of course I wanted them to have food to eat,
my apologizes I repeated and wanted to make clear.

They accepted the bag quite humbly,
truly grateful that I had changed my mind.
I thought I'd feel better after helping them out,
but I didn't, because I knew this happens all the time.


So dear diary, even though I helped this family, I'm still feeling
pretty low about it. I wish I could have done more. I wish
the world was'nt the way it is...what I really wish is that I could
help everyone. I know that isn't possible, but if I'm gonna dream,
I'm gonna dream BIG. 

 

 

Copyright 2008 Shelly Price

(c) Nevadapoet

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  • Riamh
    September 3
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    I could feel what you were feeling as I read this. It was a very honest and well expressed write. A very human response to an unexpected situation. I commend your change of heart. It truly reflects the sort of person you are.
    Best of luck in the contest.
    Slayer


    • nevadapoet
      September 14
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      Thank you slayer for stopping by to read...always a pleasure to see your colors on my page...I mean that!!!
      Nevadapoet

  • CatQueen248
    September 1

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    A few things: line 6 "nowhere" is one whole word and line 20 is think you mean "quite", no "quit." Besides that I really liked this. Also its so true. The people in the world aren't as nice as they used to be and it is extremely hard to please everyone, no matter how hard you try. Great write and thanks for the comment.


    • nevadapoet
      September 2
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      WOW...thanks for the corrections. I could read that thing 100 times and wouldn't have caught the errors...to close to the wsork to notice I guess. So thanks a bunch, I appreciate it, as well as the read and the much welcome comments.
      Nevadapoet

  • Midnight-x-Rose gold member
    August 29

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    I can definately relate... you can only do so much as one person and that's really hard to accept! I know what you mean though, sometimes you don't know what to do in this situation, it's understandable especially when we are caught off guard.

    • nevadapoet
      September 1
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      Thank you for the read and the comments, they are much appreciated and always welcome.
      Nevadapoet

  • myrataal silver member
    August 27

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    Dear Poetess ...

    all over the world families, or homeless souls, are begging for basics. We are often eager to say: help them to help themselves ... but what do we do to make it possible? It is not so easy at all! What we can do, is to give of our love, compassion, means ... How little it may be, in the eyes of Jesus it is enough. It is the intention of the heart that counts ...

    Long gone is the time to say: do not give to beggars, you only reinforce their helplessness. No. We, having more, should share what we have. Constantly. Every second of the day. Never disregard those knocking on YOUR door.

    You did the right thing ... I felt the anguish in this poem. It once happened to me that someone asked me for help, and instead of saying: COME TO MY HOUSE, I did a prayer for them, then I left them standing there (can you believe I did this? Not inviting them to my home?), drove back to my house, packed a bag, and then on my return they were gone ... I then dropped the bag at a Night Shelter ...

    I struggled with the memories of their pleading eyes ... UP TO THIS DAY.

    The best moment to help is NOW. And do it in an appropriate way. With LOVE and with care, even should you phone for extensive help, like trying to get shelter for those homeless (like I did, but was told the social welfare organization is saturated with applications and could not help!), or by reaching into own soul to hear the Inner Voice instructing.

    Well, I can go on and on about this topic. I was helped in wondrous ways in the past. The computer I am typing on, was a gift from a soul who said God sent him to me ... What can I say to that? God does weird and miraculous things.

    Blessed be and good luck in this contest with your compassionate write. It truly touched my heart.

    Love
    Myra


    • nevadapoet
      September 1

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      OOOOH how sad that this happens to all of us...I am so sorry you struggled with the memories for so long, although I can certanely relate...It would have haunted me for quite sometime if I had not run after them.
      Thanks for the read and the very welcome comments.
      Nevadapoet
  • Hello.

    A touching event, told in a conversational relaxed manner. Seems to have had quite an effect on you. I do have some subjective suggestions for improvement, other than the spelling of course, hahaha.

    Stanza 2 line 4; "nowhere" is one word.

    Stanza 3 line 2 and 3, have to say I don't like "there stood" repeated one line after the other, perhaps on line 3 you could use those two words to describe her in some way?

    Stanza 6 line 2, should be "I'm quite"

    Stanza 6 line 4 "door I"

    Last stanza line 3 "wasn't".

    This is a little wordy in places, it could do with tightening up, not much though. Overall I thought it was a nice write, touching as I said. I wish you well in the contest.

    My regards.


  • hotchocolate gold member
    August 26

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    Great write! Some people may not have much to give but there are always people with less. If only people would give to the ones that have less. If we all would help each other this would be a better place.


    • nevadapoet
      August 26
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      Thank you for reading...this just happened last Friday and it has been bothering me since it happened. You are so right about if we all would help the world would be a better place. I'm glad I went after them, or I would never be able to forgive myself.
      Thanks again.
  • Dream Big...that's the way to go!!

    I liked your community spirit that you showed this family Shelly. The way you put it to rhyme was superb. Good story...great poem!!


    • nevadapoet
      August 26
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      Thank you for reading...this happened to me on Friday, so it was an easy entry for the contest I entered...I appreciate your comments.
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