My King
# 7
each night i wait
for the king to call me
to say goodnight
# 8
sometimes he forgets
because he is too busy
but i understand
Jenelda White Aug 27th 2008
A contest entry
- FOR MEMBERS of HUGH WYLES FAVOURITES GROUP ONLY by hugh wyles.
1750 points, ended September 4, 41 entries
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Lets hope that after reading this he won't forget anymore
And if he still does...SHOUT to him
Yes, I'm a bad daughter lol
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Dear Jen,
Clever way to remind the king not to forget to call you each night.
I think it's sweet that he calls to say good night..I'm glad you understand when he gets too busy..I'm sure he does the best he can.
Best of Luck in this contest!
<3 Maureen
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I think 8 could stand by itself - it would contain all of 7 by implication, and be a very tight senryu. The emotional expression would be crystalline!
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Dear Jen,
Sorry 'bout that! You know I suffer from C R A F T and, if A/J didn't remind me, I'd forget to turn Queen Edna's E/B on at 8pm and then I'd be really deep in the mulligatawny.
Anyway, I get the merssage and it's a very well-written remindaku. Best of luck in the contest and thanks for entering.
Love and hugs, XXX Hugh (R.)
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That is actually kind of sad. Sort of like waiting by the phone for a call that doesn't come.
Other than King Hugh, (and King Yem,) King's are jerks...
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Yep, I must admit out of all the Kings I know, you and King Hugh are the best!
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