Standing on the bridge with a pocket full of flame,
sharing debt, sharing names and nothing more.
Truth in your sun that burns my skin to three degrees,
peeling layers of my soul unto the floor.
Abandonment in ink seems to carry stronger guilt,
it seems for sharks you’ll bother with a show.
Piece me back together then puzzle me with lies,
might as well, for old time sake before we go.
Laughing like a clown that’s been left out in the rain,
there’s nothing funny when the paint dries on your face.
Signing dotted lines on golden paper worth its price,
keeping secrets; legal fees and hearts can not erase.
Twelve years of tarnished pennies fill my empty cup,
but the thief in you could not resist the thrill.
Despite the silver spoon that was shoved right up your ass,
you stole it all and left me with the bill.
Division never appealed to this poet, that you know,
so stuff your glutton face and take the pie.
You have nothing left to give that I could ever want
except the beauty of a notarized goodbye.
Author notes
My wedding day:
Most woman worry that they will start crying at the alter when they are saying their vows….I was petrified that I would start crying and ruin my eye-makeup…however the goof ball in me took over… and when the wave of emotions hit me….my response was to start cracking up…..
Flash forward to the divorce….
“don’t cry Jamie…..don’t cry…be strong” I told myself….guess what?
Yep….the goofball returned…. and just like the start of this marriage the ending also had me free of tears….but laughing my ever loving ass off.
(hence the laughing like a clown line in the poem!)
In a list
A contest entry
- SHOW ME YOUR BEST...Anything Goes by nevadapoet.
900 points, ended September 12, 70 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Life changing (Big points!!) by Ambrea.
850 points, ended October 19, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Hi Jamie. Your poem expressed your anger and frustration. Thank goodness we have a site that can do just that. My thoughts are with you. Thanks for writing Jamie and for all you do on this site.
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Excellent Writing
The 4th verse is a corker!
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Wow this was such a fantastic piece, I was really blown away with the flow ant the rhyme that seemed so easy when talking about a difficult experience. I really appreciated this read!!
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poetry is cathartic, isn't it? it's the very best medicine.
so much energy seems to flow into your poetry and yet you always manage to keep the rhythm and flow so tight and natural. not contrived. imagery, symbolism and emotion - you packed it all in here and it is powerful. great poem. - NANGALEEMA
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"Twelve years of tarnished pennies..." I love that. I really dig this immensely. I love angry poetry that speaks from the heart, with honest emotion that is undeniable and almost overwhelming. Love the opening symbolism of the bridge; what does a bridge do? It takes us from one side of something to the other. We cross over bridges, on our way to some place else, someplace beyond the raging turbulence of the rushing waters, the bridge takes us from here to there. Excellent.
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This is beautiful! Great imagery and the fact that you laugh at your wedding and at the end of the relationship, it shows that you have strong character! I can see that tradgic events wont hold you down!
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too words 'bad ass''
Loved this poem! I like it the best out of all you others. You really have talent you could go along way.
Rock on and have a good day.
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Lovw it.
You shouldve gotten first.
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Sometimes your work makes me think that we might live parallel lives, great job, as usual...
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Thank you for your entry in the contest. This is an excellent poem allowing us an insight to your own private life and showing us how you dealt with your feelings during a difficult time. Excellent rhyme and flow.
All the best
Sue and Jeff
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What a beautiful write, a great entry for this contest. A perfectly penned write with great flow and good imagery. Thank you for the entry. Keep the pen flowing...the pleasure was all mine.
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A poem that many can relate to these days. We all deal with the stress in our own way and I like the way you do it. Laughing is much better than violence or fear. By laughing you let it go. An excellent poem and way to look at life! Great write!
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This is sad yet beautiful. It captures your emotions wonderfully, puts me in your shoes, and allows me to understand your feelings. I also really enjoyed reading your author's notes. The story behind the poem made it a better read because I felt I had inside information on the situation. Wonderful job!
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Oh my this is sad
We often dont jknow what we will do until it hits us but sorry for the devorce I hate to see anyone break up
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This is a sad and strong poem. It really touched me. I admire your strength and your skill as a poet, Your feelings are expressed beautifully.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Be well,
Slayer
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Sometimes I think laughter is a way of coping with things. I have laughed when I should haven't.
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wowie!!
'Piece me back together then puzzle me with lies,' oh f*** me!!! this was a great write and i loved tha line i also loved 'Despite the silver spoon that was shoved right up your ass,you stole it all and left me with the bill.' i love the connotations. Im sorry it did not work out bt im happy you are not crushed by it! lovely poem! xxxx
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great write! i'm sorry it didn't work out and i'm glad you can laugh again! hopefully your happy now. this was a very well expression of your feelings i really liked it good luck in the contest
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EXCELLENT
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Excellent
another great work from one of my favorite writer...
hmm..
i love the title, first and foremost and how the whole piece is connected to you.
I can't pick out my favorite line since every line has a kind of depth in it and I love those...
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excellent
Twelve years of tarnished pennies fill my empty cup,
but the thief in you could not resist the thrill.
Despite the silver spoon that was shoved right up your ass,
you stole it all and left me with the bill.
Division never appealed to this poet, that you know,
so stuff your glutton face and take the pie.
You have nothing left to give that I could ever want
except the beauty of a notarized goodbye.
beautiful work.I loved it .the flow was perfect and the sitautionw as described in full.thanks for sharing. Please visit my poetry and jot in some comments.I am also building an AP family.Would you like to hop in?
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Haha, sorry but that last bit in your AN made me giggle. This was wonderfully penned, you've a way with words.
. Rewarded 4
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amazing
what a twist! I'm proud of you for being able to comprehend such imagery into my mind...specially so late at night it gets hard to focus but you kept my train of thoughts going. I love love love this poem. That very first stanza stunned me "Standing on the bridge with a pocket full of flame,"
SOOOO Beautiful <3 <3
. Rewarded 6
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prof. mes/rectifies/ yer verse
Laughing like a clown that’s been happy in the rain,
There’s nothing funny when the paint flaw in
A face signing dotted lines on golden paper
Keeping secrets; legal fees and hearts there!
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this is realy painful.....words are still inadequate to express feelings and situation like this....because it is such a scar ....
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Superb!
Well thought out and timeless in its message! I absolutely Love the title! Creates vivid imagery in the mind of the reader and something many can relate to!The best clown is she who laughs best! You rock ! Keep up the great work!Best of luck in the contest! Regards
. Rewarded 6
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It's not right for a lady to have to undergo the sort of misery that comes with failed dreams. We all think things will be forever. Then, when they are torn by the weakest threads and all the good pieces fall apart, we learn a painful truth. And, it's learned over and over. Circumstance is often the ugly side of reality. This poem was filled with deep emotional symbolism. It cut through the thick of things and made me realise, again, how painful it can all be. It's good you can find the strength to laugh. Some of us aren't that strong.
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We're not clowns, but we do feel like it. Laughter is the best way to hide the tears. Keeps'em guessing too! Anyone who's been there can relate to this candid poem. Kudos, keep laughing and best wishes in the contest!
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Beautifully expressed with strength and laughter, both go hand in hand and keep those tears from consuming us and leaving us mired in our failures, giving us the fortitude to seek new horizons and forget about the goodbyes. Great work doll, loved it
Hugs, Bunny
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Awww.. I don't like clowns
but you don't look like a clown to me 
But laughing?! now I like to do that! lol.. this was really wonderful.. I really loved the imagery here.. thanks much for sharing!! best of luck in the contest..
Angel
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you are not a clown, but to laugh...now, that is something we all need to do once in a while when things look grim...I personally love the strength I get from this poem. Love, Lane
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Definately a masterpiece indeed!
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I have to say, after reading this poem, I'm smiling. It's not because of the intriguing humour you've attached to a devastating experience - it's just that I always feel elated when I come across an awesome writing style.
It doesn't flow, but sharp meaning rides along the stanzas and shoves reality in your face with all the beautiful grace of an accomplished poet.
I'll have to echo previous comments to say how much I love this line:
"Despite the silver spoon that was shoved right up your ass,
you stole it all and left me with the bill."
It gave me a bit of a shock actually XD
But the line that, >.> umm, takes the biscuit and entire cookie jar, shall I say, is:
"Piece me back together then puzzle me with lies"
I like that far too much.
So, well done ^^
It's fantastic.
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this is very fitting for the contest, it may very well be your best...in my mind anyway...exceptional writing, filled with strength and a passionate belief in yourself. Great rhyming and rhythm just adds the pepper to an awesome main course...very well done!
Rory
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This is a very cool poem...I like all of it an there is nothing to change.
This poem is very deepan in another way beautiful with emotion.
I hope you have better relationships then this the next time around.
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Awesome work
This is truly an amazing piece...so much truth that I sympathize with completely...even down to the "twelve years" line...we have so many similarities in our past...you are an amazingly gifted woman Jamie...I always feel lucky to read your work...and even luckier to have found a beautiful connection to your gorgeous poetic voice.
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Chickens!!
. Rewarded 6
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This piece is a definite WOW. It is fast paced and cleverly written. No short of wonderful...brilliant to be exact.
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My twin! This is painfully true in my life as well and I never fail to be amazed how closely we relate. I hope that I handle the next sixty days of my life with as much grace & humor as you portray in this poem. Kudos to you!
(and just a side note: what little I know of you, he was a loser that never deserved you anyway!)
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Jamie, this has so much emotion and is so well expressed. I relate to every feeling you have expressed in this piece. I know words are sometimes overused to describe poetry on this site, but this poem is truly......brilliant.
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Wow
Love Despite the silver spoon that was shoved right up your ass, you stole it all and left me with the bill. and You have nothing left to give that I could ever want except the beauty of a notarized goodbye. Is pure poetic magic. Great final goodbye.
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This is extremely powerful. Once again, you've touched on a subject that many, including myself, can relate to. Once again, you've captured the essence of said subject beautifully. Superb metaphors and rhythm. I love how it just builds and builds to the last two stanzas.
Which, by the way, are fucking fantastic.
Brilliant!
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realy well done, i enjoyed the read thanks for posting it and the best of luck in the contest
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What a superb poem, I have never been through this but if I did I'd love to be able to face it and write about it this well.
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