I fight the furies deep within
My soul's so lost I can't begin
The whirlwind sweeps me further down
I claw and grasp but gain no ground
The Mach inferno beats me numb
No longer care to fight or run
Instead I finger sharpened blade
The darkest thougts my mind invade
I think of family; picture friends
Will they forgive when my life ends?
The tears that well behind my eyes
They burn and seeth and tell no lies
The blade bites sharply into skin
I feel the pain release within
As I watch the crimson flow
I know too late I should not go
Sadly watch from in my grave
I see the terror on her face
My sweetest wish my greatest love
The child crying from above
J.D. Garrett
8-27-2008
2:39pm
Author notes
Option: #1 Write something about suicide or cutting
screenname: Poeticcaresses. This one is for you, Mariah, my beautiful daugher.
In a list
A contest entry
- Just Let Me Fade Away.... (Options) by Lae-Fire.
500 points, ended August 27, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come One, Come All - The Circus Is In Town by Lowercase Prelude.
4000 points, ended October 15, 122 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Its Our Little Secret (( PROMPT)) by HereComesTheSun.
550 points, ended November 30, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest - { depression/ suicide} by Autumn-Marie.
702 points, ended November 30, 85 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
Comments
1 - 8 of 8
-
Great
You write just the type of poetry i like: carefully worded, nicely set out and very meaningful.
"The whirlwind sweeps me further down
I claw and grasp but gain no ground"
These lines speak to me the most, as a lot of the time it feels as though i'm caught up in something and i can't stand on solid earth.
Thanks for writing this!
-
'The Mach inferno beats me numb
No longer care to fight or run'
those lines hit me hard.
I'm going to have to check out more of your work,
it's pretty amazing.
-
From the Author
Depression and chronic pain have been a part of my life for 21 years. I've battled the suicide thoughts for most of it. It is the thoughts of my two beautiful daughters and what it would do to them that brings me back from that edge when I am there. This is for them. -
This is a terrific write, I hope it is not related you, author.
-
-
see above...
-
-
This just shows that you are a strong person instead of weak. Fighting what we face in life only proves our strength, suicide is just an escape we take from the hurt and pain and it only creates more hurt and pain.
I'm sure your daughters are proud of you, they should be.
God bless and may you find happiness for you deserve it!
-
-
-
I hope that date does correspond to anything this tragic for the author. I very heartfelt and real way of depicting the final regret of most people sho seek to take their own lives. For some reason the song "Stay" from the Shakespear Sisters is playing in my head
-
Terrific. Very good. Thanks for entering
Adding your comment:
1 - 8 of 8
