If I had a wish
I'd wish i were dead,
dead for a day in September
The days were cold
all the colours were bold
I'l like to see if you'd all remember
The days of old
where i liked you
and you liked me,
and we all got along just fine
Our problems were small
like "Who ate my cookie?"
and no one would tell on their friend
yes
if i had a wish
i'd wish i were dead
dead for a day with no end
dead for a day in september
dead for a day
that i hope
you'd remember.
Author notes
my temp english teacher loved this one.
ask anything, any comment is nice. hate it or love it, just let me know.
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Love it.
That's really sad that you feel that way.
Any reason why?
Just to see who'd miss you?> It's something I think we'd all like to know.
Touching poem.... -
Your teacher liked it beacause it is great, Loved the last part and all. Nice and simple and clean, very emotional and had a sad touch in it, yet a longing to remember a day.
Very nice!
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There is a lot of emotion on those words. I like the fact that you chose to write this avoiding very fancy words or metaphors. Sometimes the simple facts are far more moving. Well done
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I like this too. It has a sadness to it yet is is very creative and beautiful as well. I especially like the second stanza. Well done poet.
I hope you will continue to write and share your words.
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