(song)
Ladies of the sea
come sing with me
come into this sweet symmetry
Ladies of the sea
come dance with me
dare to see your divinity
Ladies of the sea
come be with me
acclimate this alchemy
Wet as water
pure as wine
pursue if you faulter
the truth takes time
Ladies of the sea
come cry with me
cry into this reality
Ladies of the sea
come scream with me
scream until we are free
Ladies of the sea STOP
and see
whats between you
and what you could be
Lazy little lovelies
Lift your feet
Turn the keys
Taste within you, holey
Forgive as you live
Feel with in you, holey
Ladies of the sea
ride with me
ride this wave
revolutionary
Taste within you, holey
Ladies of the sea
rise with me
rise into prosperity
Feel within you, purity
Ladies of the sea
come sing with me
merge into this melody
with sweat, tears and harmony
Wet as water
pure as wine
pursue if you faulter
the truth takes time
Lazy little lovelies
Lift your feet
Turn the keys
Taste within you, holey
Forgive as you live
Feel within you, holey
Ladies of the sea
come speak with me
tell our truth
until we are free
settle in this sweet symmetry
Ladies of the sea
Author notes
Not the final draft. Under construction...
Comments?
I sing it softly, almost like a lullaby.
whats going on in your portals girls and boys?
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This flowed wonderfully, what inspired your lovely ladies of the sea...curious? My favorite part is
"Lazy little lovelies
Lift your feet
Turn the keys"
I liked the variation on the Ladies of the Sea? I think another variation where you have "ladies of the sea" would make it speak even more. Very nice!
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i love the imagery in this poem great write.
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This is good. One thing, never beg to have your work look upon. In time they will come
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AHHH,
Daughter of Jupiter.
My mermaid of the revolution,
poetic and dripping wet,
rising,
forgiving,
waiting for truth.
This has all your stellar hallmarks
of gathering and organizing for something positive... freedom.
If this were handed to me without your name...
I would know it was written by you...
not because it is similar to any of your other pieces,
but the unbridled passion that you posses that few writers have.
This piece is just a part of some of the best and moving pieces that urge others to stand and act for change and freedom...
The poem I wrote about you on your page is so on the money , it is scary.
We must have fought in a distant war in another time and place...
side by side,
bloody and broken,
but victorious.
My trousers have been blown of since the first poem I ever read from you lass...
now here we are...
without trousers....
Im gettin a bit chilly...
any suggestions?
nice ones....lol
BURRRRP!
[damn...I swallowed that roach]
Bless you always gypsy,
I love your work.
LOWELL
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I liked it. It's a limited like as I can't bring out the rhythm from just reading it, but I bet its heightened with music. I like how you played with sea and see. Just as a symbol the sea or the ocean often represents an empowered mother figure. This coupled with the overall tone this seems to hold some very strong feminist/lesbian undertones, it's not a bad thing at all, but I'm curious is this poem a condemnation of man and all our assholish bullshit as well as a poem of female empowerment, or am I just jumping to quickly to conclusions?
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I like the rhythm and rhyming a lot, and the imagery is nice. Nice write.
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I like it. Keep it up!
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Well,
I think it's pretty good as far as it's gotten. I love the repition of "ladies of the sea"...it really gives the poem flow. Not sure what that particularly refers to, but I like it anyway.
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Hmmm... a call to Mermaid's Union Local 301? heh! The reference to Sufis is interesting... Islam? YOU?! Hmmm... are you still going to pull a write in vote for Ron Paul, or are you content with McCain now that Miss Sarah's on the ticket? I know I don't want the communist sympathizer Obama within a million miles of the White House. I once vowed to never pull a McCain lever, but if he would be so kind as to resign on day one, I wouldn't mind a Palin presidency.
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