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The Tiger and the Gazelle

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Wide eyes scared and vulnerable,
her head bowed down to graze.
The young gazelle is safely
under Tiger's watchful gaze.

His eyes on the horizon,
ever alert to danger.
Shielding from a distance
until it's time to claim her.

She glances up, eyes seek eyes;
as they meet, he's chosen.
Graceful moves, the dance begins.
His stare holds her, frozen.

Purposefully approaches her,
certain in his advance.
Reaches out and mouth meets neck,
her body yields to trance.

Teeth tenderly pierce her throat,
he carries her away
to the palace he has made
to keep others at bay.

Delights in the weight of her,
in holding her like this.
Gently lays her on soft grass
as he deepens his kiss.

Jaw widens and he moves more
until his mouth is filled
with warm, young flesh of his gazelle.
Lovingly, she's killed.

She's protected within paws,
he's underneath her spell.
Consuming, they become one,
Tiger and his Gazelle.

 

 

 

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  • I still think that this is and was 'the dog's bollocks' for this contest.
    This is a FANTASTIC piece!

    Sol
  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    September 22
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    THIS IS SIMPLY FANTASTIC!!!

    What a response!
    I think it excellent and smack in the middle of what was intended, as the kind of take which I'd hoped might come from the prompt.

    Aspects and meanings so close and real within our own nature, being seen reflected and exemplified in the 'Animal' world. A world which is actually non-other and not a separate one from our own, when we open to it.

    Mankind, unlike other creatures has been given an eye for every universe, an ability to leap in consciousness to wherever he focuses with a potential to be witness to it all.
    All being aspects of his own interior nature reflected in the phenomenal world, else there would be no such recognition possible. What does a sea-cucumber know or care about bison or vice versa? It is only our kind that can do this, abstracting and synthesising in living thought with all we are brought to reflect upon...

    and here, I believe is a remarkable example which expands beyond the limited and constricted habitual categorisations of things.

    I see much beauty here and I LOVE IT!!!

    Thank you so much for sharing this excellent entry.

    Sol


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 22

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    You have done this so wonderfully... what could be a 'cringe' subject, you have managed to make beautiful!


  • Cannonsfire gold member
    September 10

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    Second Time lucky!

    This is a beautiful piece where the hunter and their prey is a metaphor for lover's, the sensual description and juxtaposition of the animals works extremely well C
  • sgking123
    September 6

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    excellent

    Delights in the weight of her,
    in holding her like this.
    Gently lays her on soft grass
    as he deepens his kiss.

    Jaw widens and he moves more
    until his mouth is filled
    with warm, young flesh of his gazelle.
    Lovingly, she's killed.

    She's protected within paws,
    he's underneath her spell.
    Consuming, they become one,
    Tiger and his Gazelle.

    Eating and becoming one.wow...great concept...a hapless liona nd aggressive gazelle....so it would seem.........welld one.pls visit my poetry and offer comments.I loved the above stanzas.




  • Maria1968
    September 6
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    Beautiful...

  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    September 6
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    <

    I bet you're popular at parties

  • faithwhisperer
    August 31

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    Absolutely beautiful, Lucy, and I have to say this sounds very lyrical, as if it could be a song! Lovely! Well done indeed! Thanks!


  • apples fell
    August 30

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    This is all the things that makes poetry....Poetry.
    The sad quality of the writing is held in high regards with the more natural aspects of the piece. There is a weightlessness around the words and yes, an urgent sense capturing the ferocious intent and blood coming out of the freshly made wound. This could also be used as a metaphor for other things in life....

    Thoughtful and striking piece.

    ;


  • XMatthewJamesX
    August 30
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    Woooow what a piece stunning from begining to end


  • KayJay silver member
    August 30

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    Absolutely stunning! This was a wonderful description of nature in her purest form. Not savage but sensual; not death but life; love... Brilliant!
    Ken


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    August 30

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    I love how you've taken something that could be seen as startlingly raw, or perhaps even cold when it's witnessed from the 'law of nature view' and turned the perspective around in such a way that the beauty of the natural order is exposed.

    Of course that's not all that's here, this is the merging of two sides to a personality in a way as well, the fearless tiger and the shy gazelle, anger, love, and many other things... and of course it could also be the coming together of two who create an equal balance as that one..

    there I believe I've rambled enough now... yes?



    • Lucy. gold member
      August 30

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      No, not anywhere near enough! I love your ramblings.

      Thank you for the comment....please, may I have some more?



  • profmes
    August 30

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    prof. mes/rectifies/ yer verse

    Big delights in the moderate weight of her,
    in holding something like this.
    "Gently lays her on soft grass"
    as he deepens his fatal kiss.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Angelflower Greeters member
    August 30

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    Bravo!

    Wow.. this was really beautiful!! It seemed almost.. romantic! and yet it's about death in a way.. but you have worded this so beautifully. No pain or anything! I really loved the way you told the story here.. The imagery was just so vivid! it was like you could see it all happening like a movie! It really amazed me.. Thanks so much for sharing something so beautiful! best of luck  in the contest!!

    Angel

  • Tehuni
    August 29

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    This is beautiful. The way you treat the hunter/prey relationship... or possibly the way you have given the roles of a hunter and his prey to two people in a romantic relationship... this poem is cleverly and well written.
    I only with for more and better illustrations

    . Rewarded 6

  • Wow!!!!!

    Oh My Gosh! I really felt that instant chemistry from this poem just with the kick ass cool title for the poem and then reading this WOW!!! I am extremely impressed by the incredibly depth and detailing you poste dinto this poem. I mean my gosh I could see all of this unfolding within m sick sadistic mind and its just incredible what you did here. any ways an incredibly poem which deserves more than my mere 3 applauses but I will be shocked ifyou do not place in this contest as I really think this deserves a gold. any ways best of luck in the contest & keep up the very good work. Signed, Tiger =)

    . Rewarded 8


    • Lucy. gold member
      August 29
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      Wow! Thank YOU for such an enthusiastic comment. Glad you enjoyed it.

  • ears2hearyou gold member
    August 29

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    lusciously written....

    the instincts of beast...and their wisdom and respect
    of the "kill"

    you know sweet poetess...i saw a coyote come down from
    within our hills one time and steal a sheep, shake it,
    breaks it's chest open and rip out the rib cage in less
    then 3 minutes...

    I stood there, in absolute FEAR and AMAZEMENT.
    My gawd...until you see it or have read this poem,
    the instincts are astounding.

    and wow...did you give justice to it!
    ears/Seattle
    my goodness... a lovely and dark poetess is blooming
    lusciously before my eyes!
    I'll have you writing vampire in no time at all!
    just kidding! way to write...
    captivating us!

    . Rewarded 8


    • Lucy. gold member
      August 29
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      Thank you for such a wonderful comment!

  • evilbatwoman
    August 29

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    It's interesting how you romanticized the kill. It was a new perspective and kept me reading. The flow and rhyme scheme are good. I liked this one, except for my neck feeling very vulnerable now.

    . Rewarded 4

  • Shayla Walker
    August 29
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    The world is a scary place. Concreat jungle-grassy jungle it is all the same.


  • NurseChilly gold member
    August 29

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    the hunter becomes the prey and vice versa... life is like that, it twists on the vine... if eve hadn't eaten that bloody apple huh?? lolol
    got a lot to answer for, that woman, she made us love them!!!
    the consumation of love and nature becomes so clear here...


  • Valley Girl Greeters member
    August 29

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    Wow! You have created such a beautiful and magical piece! I like how you had made this with human emotions and related them to the wild animals. Brilliant and passionate! This is definetly a gold winner! Wow! I'm speechless lol! Best of luck!


  • OrangeMarmalade silver member
    August 29

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    Wow.

    Never expected you to pick this sort of topic, and make a poem out of it. Not that it's bad - I think it's excellently penned. I think this is the first time you've surprised me in opening another genre.


  • Amarige
    August 29

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    This is lovely Lucy..I enjoyed the read and the human feelings within the animal wilderness..I love tigers as well ..


    'Teeth tenderly pierce her throat,
    he carries her away
    to the palace he has made
    to keep others at bay. '

    Wonderful verse indeed..I like the sentiment expressed in those lines..best of luck in the contest my friend

    Ruby

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