Bubble baths
tickle toes
soothing weary souls.
Author notes
Contest prompt #1 purity.
Haiku has always interested me...any helpful tips would be appreciated.
Should i have said...soles...instead of souls?
1st timer here!
(although I've been told within my poems, I've written haiku and did not know it)
A contest entry
- Haiku-me by Kappa.
2100 points, ended September 22, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This was a good attempt and not to far off. No period at end of third line. "Baths" should be bath, single gives it more meaning. Then you need a dash for a pause after your second line. Lastly I the last line is good except you need to make it single again, refering it to one person that everyone can apply to them selves. This was very good and an interesting twist. thx for entering.
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Sounds ok to me!
all bubbly and tickley and soothing! makes me wiggle my toes
good luck 
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Nicely done! It made me smile!
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"tickle toes" makes me smile
this is simple, short and sweet, just as a haiku should be. i think it is really up to you whether you want to use "souls" or "soles". best of luck in the contest.
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Sounds soothing to me. Make no changes keep it as it is. Nice write my friend.
Brian
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Ears!
this is great my friend, i don't know about haikus, but i know what i like when i read it! good stuff my friend!
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That was great!!
So much said in 7 words!
Love the 'soothing weary souls.' part.
I think no changes need to be made, I think it's great the way it is!
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