She looked at the Desk...where he had written before
A note, a ring, and a pear was all that was left
She didn't know if she would see him again
A tear slid down her pale cheek, a salty theft
If only he didn't have to go maybe a relationship could mend
She read the letter word for word
A love that never was that could've been
In every sentence, it was him she heard
Saying I love you played out as a scene
All that had been left with her were broken dreams
A ring to represent how he felt...
Nothing could help her heart from this pain
A pear to show her their love was sweet but would melt
It was a kind of love no one could ever attain.
And so she sat crying and thinking of how
He made her heart sputter at every touch
It didn't seem so dumb to tell him how she felt now
But it was too late he was gone with dusk's clutch
"Maybe..."she thought..."just maybe...he will return."
A hopeful mind full of confusion
A hopeless poetical love
There may never be a conclusion
Only with stars above
There holds an ideal illusion.
What's your first impresion?
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Beautifully poignant
Very touching, this one. I love the imagery, especially the 'salty theft'. Each line really conveys a deep and haunting love.
Great work!
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cute again beverly,, very wistful love x
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Thank Peter! I'm glad you like it!
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i only got three entries for this contest and yours was one...giving you one hundred points for your efforts...thank you for this really WONDERFUL poem - I can see why so many read your work. Hopefully you will enter another contest of mine. Love, Lane
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Thank you! I think this is one of the best comments I've gotten in a long time. I'm glad to see so many people like my poems. It's really just a hobby I've always had. I'm really sorry that more people didn't enter your contest. I thought it was a cool idea. Thank you so much for the points!! Sorry for reply so late...it's just I just started college so I'm working on hw and such right now. XD Thank you so much again!
<3 Beverly
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One of your most touching and heartfelt writes ever here Such emotions here and heart as always from you, it's so amazing...
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Thank you so much for your lovely comment! I really appreciate feedback.
I rather like this poem myself...but then again I wrote it. lol
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I know I was in a hurry I just started college.
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