living among strangers its
not that i want to
leave but i know i
cannot possibly stay
where paws are like
a confused newly born
amputee
and my spirit
swings its red and white striped
back &nd forth
impatient and only
among strangers
only among the counterfeit does
fuzzy within finally feel at ease
i never really;;
i don’t
really belong
do i?;;
i don’t have;;;
i don’t write poems i
just make them up
today
among strangers
hairspray overdose screams
‘unique?’
$$&&whispers: insecure
and i lie
and i tell lies
p-r-e-t-e-n-d i am one of
you and there will
be no accusations of just
trying to be
more special
than every-
-body else
when in fact i am just
just
just the opposite
hide it
hide it among
among strangers
human hands that
hold nothing
(((I want them to hate me)))
wake up and smile &&&
FAKE it
smile and pretend
because looking
up where
would i be without
this cage my
human body
What do y'all think?
Comments
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I like the enjambment and irregular punctuation, the unconventional and fragmented sentence structure.
I like the title, but it should either have a capital at the start of each word, or only a capital at the start of the first word to be gramatically correct. I know you might have deliberately written it the way it is written to emphisise "Sunglasses", but it's my opinion that it would look better one way or the other. Gramatical errors like that can take away from your work.
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i like the simplicity of this one, (at least my head doesn't ache as with other poems where I need to cencentrate so hard to try to find the meaning of it)
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