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wear those flowing gypsy clothes for me

wear those flowing

gypsy clothes for me

the skittered skirts

the beaded bells and

bangles jangling

 

come and hunt

for wild raspberries’

red embers

underneath

the dying leaves

 

risk the nettle-sting

 

wear all

the Romany colours

the fading blood-clouds

of crimson

the leaf-fall gold

 

take

the sweet-as-kisses

savagery

upon your tongue

 

make me turn

my face rainwards

as you lick the juice

from the corner

of my chin

 

and then

 

da capo

in your nomad robes

tick my skin with

the tip-tappitty-tip of

your tambourine fingers

till I tintinabulate

 

and twirl

around

and around…

 

 

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  • maa gold member
    September 12
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    the old nun within me goes : "oh my god, what a sin !"
    while the curious lil girl peeks through the keyhole, fascinated by the sin (I mean scene) ...

    now, let's go tickle that nun !!!


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 12
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      ... after all, it IS nun-tickling season!@

      • maa gold member
        September 12
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        great, let's go out and get them !!!

        • Mairi bheag gold member
          September 12
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          Aw nuts! I got Mother Superior!

          Who've you got?

          • maa gold member
            September 12

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            great catch !
            I've got a monk hiding in the closet of one of the nuns ...

  • Dark Otter gold member
    September 10

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    Damn, how did I get here?

    I was just running around and I ended up here. That's a pretty hot scene that's playing in front of me. They look like they're having lots of fun. I'm embarassed to watch, but I can't stop. I feel like I'm right there. Is this you just having fun? Well done, Mairi


    • maa gold member
      September 12
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      hey, you cheeky lil monkey, what are you doing here ?
      just kidding in response to your headline ...
      by the way : what am I doing here ?
      it must be the gypsy-theme that has seduced me ...

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 10
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      Yep, this is just me having fun.

  • Dalaney gold member
    September 1

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    Everything you write fills me with a sense of awe, and the question, "will I ever be able to do this, too?" I know we have our own styles and our own ways of writing, but I cannot help but feel an overwhelming adoration for every word you lay to paper. This is one of the best ever, KC....my love to you, Lane xxoo


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      September 1
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      LOL, we ask this of ourselves each time we read one another's poetry! I am glad you liked this, kc.

  • IronMaiden1236
    September 1
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    lllove this lluscious aaahhliterative ssashey...


  • lilAj
    September 1

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    da capo

    in your nomad robes

    tick my skin with

    the tip-tappitty-tip of

    your tambourine fingers

    till I tintinabulate

    just wow Mairi


  • EarthToJim
    September 1

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    Oh to be hidden in the wild raspberries watching this one unfold... I don't think I'd even mind getting rained on... not that I'd do that kind of thing

    The sensuality is raw and real and described in the lushness of the language for which you are famous.

  • Bad Bill
    September 1

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    A sensual banquet, my Scottish bard, and also a celebration of language and poetic brio--wonderful!

    In admiration,
    Bill


  • Vozhd
    September 1

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    My guess is that the title is secondary. Your faithful reviewers below seem too focussed on the dance, and in tying it to the poem. My guess is that it is sensation you are describing here. The poem is very, very good.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 1

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    Yep works for me, although I would have course have written in the tarantella rhythm
    The twirling irregular and irreverent writing evokes the dance well

    (N^2*NHB=BG
    (Not bad, not bad, not half bad, in fact, bloody good)


  • balenciaga
    August 31
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    ohhhhhhhhhhh! SOO good. I love the flow. It read quickly, and I picked up the Tarantella rhythm. (At least it felt like there was to me).

    This is fantastic!

    Meg

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    • Mairi bheag gold member
      August 31
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      I wanted to suggest that rhythm, by short lines, by alliteration, and so on, rather than take a strict tarantella rhythm (dactyl after dactyl). I wanted to make the whole thing a celebration of sensuality. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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