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Watercolour Memories

 

 

 

Pigments percolate
with no harsh edges
just a blur

that’s how I remember -


     Us


seasons merge
watercolour memories
a colourwash of tears
bleeding
leave no images

canvas stretched too tight
straining the fabric
to breaking point
that’s how we were 


no easing of the tension,
something had to give
eventually it did -


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  • Jersene gold member
    September 3

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    watercolours, as a metaphor works splendidly in this...it enhances that feeling of realising that sometimes we are not meant for another...the sadness, the acceptance, etc...nicely penned


  • SilverScent gold member
    September 3

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    The metaphors and imagery used in this are breathtaking.
    My favourite image was

    "canvas stretched too tight
    straining the fabric"

    I thought this was an original way to describe a rocky relationship.

    I enjoyed too how you took the prompt and make it your own.

    Thanks for entering.

  • moonbumps silver member
    September 2
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    Top notch stuff as always.
    xxx


  • perfectlyariel
    September 1

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    This is really pretty. I loved the lines "canvas stretched too tight straining the fabric." The smooth wording made it very easy to read. Good luck

  • arafura
    September 1
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    Excellent! You are as talented at free verse as at rhyming. Bravo!


  • princess Jewelcat22
    September 1
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    even though the meaning behind it is sad I really like the way you wrote and worded this!!

  • princess Jewelcat22
    September 1

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    oh this is such a pretty write!! As always another Superb write!!! I love the first line pigments percolate with no harsh edges just a blur!! Excellent write. Love it!! ♥♥♥


  • Dalaney gold member
    September 1

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    Sue, your FV is exactly the way I like it...meaningful, simply stated, with a power punch ending. You are such a great writer. Love, Lane


  • fool no1
    September 1
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    Excellent write Sue. One can feel the tension and despondancy as this sad piece is read. ..mal


  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    September 1

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    Sue, I am a fan of rhyme. I love reading your work because you are a good rhymer. I have to say, however, this is a masterful piece of free verse. The title is perfect. The thoughts are exquisitely expressed from beginning to end. You did a great job with the metaphor.

    I loved it.

    Mike

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