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my father

maybe I'll see you again one day
walking the streets of Berlin or Bombay
with an unshaven face and a hobbled pace
looking for a way or looking for a place
deadly breath and dirty clothes
crying because no one knows
where you are or where you've been
you left us a long time ago but I don't remember when

and I was just a kid
and you were just a liar
what good you did
walking off to follow desire

the city of sin welcomed you
but you can't walk a straight line or do anything right
and while you were gone I learned and grew
I didn't need you to turn out alright

I've accepted the fact that we all fuck up
but forgiving you is too hard of a job
and I'm afraid I'll end up just like you
running away from all the hard things I have to do

and if you're sorry you should say it
because we don't know where you are
last I heard you're somewhere in Vegas
going nowhere and sleeping in your car

and I know you used to do so much good
and both our hearts want to change the world
we have the same face so you're still haunting me
and sometimes I still think twice before I pick up a drink

you used to inspire me when I was small

telling me I could be whatever I want

and sometimes I miss you more than anything

I hope one day you can see what's become of me

our paths will cross unexpectedly

and I'll cry so hard because I'll finally see

that broken people need more love than me

and life has an unspoken guarantee

family should love each other unconditionally

 

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  • February Angel
    September 11

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    Beautiful !It's full of emotions and it reminds me of my father and the hard times we had.Your poem seems simple but it's way too complicated carring in itself emotions ,social problems ,sth that we all face someday,our father ,our family .The fear of being worse,not accepted ect.Keep it up!


    • Beata
      September 11
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      that you very much for the kind words

  • written-in-ink
    September 7

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    wow

    that made me hurt a little inside
    it made me feel pain

    i loved this so much
    i just love all the emotion that you put into it

    so much

    gah
    this was amazing
    thank you so much for sharing

    and good luck
    <3

  • Godsemogurl
    September 2

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    Great poem beata. I love the feeling and emotion that you put into it. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck in it, and other contests that you decide to enter.

  • righteousme gold member
    September 2

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    i had my dad growing up and in a way , i still do ... my daughter however lives her daily life without her father , only the occasional visit or call ... lucky if its 2 times a year ... i believe in that unconditional love ... i give it all the time ... it is just hard to find someone to leak some into me ... Great Piece!!! this one is a favorite of mine now!!!


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    September 1

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    interesting. i think its always hard when a parent walks out ona family. Obviously they are not thinking how it will affect the people they are suppose to love. Im so sorry.
    good job..


    • Beata
      September 1
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      Don't be sorry...it all happens for a reason, I guess. Thank you for enjoying my poem

      • Velvet Rose Petals
        September 1
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        my ex boyfriends dad used to beat him and then he finally left him and his mom and he felt like it was his fault and that he was all messed up..it really took a toll on our relationship, because he never trusted me. its so crazy how something like that affects us..

  • Hikari Lady
    September 1

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    Wow!!! I really enjoyed reading this and loved these lines:

    "out paths will cross unexpectedly

    and I'll cry so hard because I'll finally see

    that broken people need more love than me

    and life has an unspoken guarantee

    family should love each other unconditionally"

    Well placed and great use of words and placemment. I loved every line and felt the emotions flowing from it.
    Really really a great poem, I'm bookmarking it. Keep it up!


    • Beata
      September 1
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      Thank you so much, I try my best to always end my poems with a bang. Thanks for noticing

  • scatterbrained
    September 1

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    reminds me of Styrofoam Plates by DC4C
    but this is purer because it is just pure words.
    This poem is amazing.


  • JohnPhilbin
    September 1

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    pleasure reading

    and I'll cry so hard because I'll finally see
    that broken people need more love than me..

    great descriptions... powerful piece..hope you get to sort out stuff with this person.. i think it would mean alot to you hun


  • Puppydog gold member
    September 1

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    HEART WRENCHING!!!!

    So many have parents who left them behind for no apparent reason than shelfishness. I had to learn young also to stand alone but for different reasons. Don't ever be afraid to stand strong and be yourself, make you own choices and learn from them. There will always be those out there who do care so let those who are sincere into your life and help you and the rewards will be great.


    • Beata
      September 1
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      Thank you for the kind words and advice. I appreciate your comment
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