Whirlwind Romances by Jonathan ROBIN at All poetry

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Gustav and Hanna made one pretty pair
Under age - should anybody care ?
Sat a light ? In shadows they advance.
The one tracked west the other east by chance
Aimed eye, with tidal surges everywhere.
Vain seems love's spin, unmet by moonlight their
Hurry cane crops' devastating dance
Accosting Cuba's coasts. Eye Ike askance.
Now threats engulfing Gulf oil rigs, should scare,
New Katrina, debris everywhere.
As category four blows windy glance,

Ike at fist sight prepares whirlwind romance.

Definition of Cyclone arriving on the beach : Spinny Dipping

Author notes

Pic Current Hurricane position of Ike September 2008

http://www.accuweather.com

Background Hurricane Felix Feb 2007 ISS

pic 2 Tornadoes spawning in Siberia http://englishrussia.com/?p=2030

Pic see Hurricane Katrina Eye
http://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Image:Hurricane_Katrina_Eye_viewed_from_Hurricane_Hunter.jpg

Ike expected around 9 September
Josephine possible around 14 September

2008 Hurricane Names

Arthur
Bertha
Cristobal
Dolly
Edouard
Fay
Gustav
Hanna
Ike
Josephine
Kyle
Laura
Marco
Nana
Omar
Paloma
Rene
Sally
Teddy
Vicky
Wilfred

For previous version 1 September 2008

Gustav and Hanna make one pretty pair
Under age - should anybody care?
Sat a light? In shadows they advance.
The one tracks west the other east by chance
Aims eye, with tidal surges everywhere.
Vain seems love's spin, unmet by moonlight their
Hurry cane crops' devastating dance
Awaits two partners more. Eye Ike askance
Now forming off the Leeward Islands - there
Number four consolidates, could scare
Americans this month. Another glance,
Ike, Josephine, await whirlwind romance.

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Courtesy welcome and extended

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C.I.M.A Punk
September 20

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I really like this one. It rocks me like a hurricane.
The acrostic form and the photos were a bonus to a nice poem.

Well done and good luck!
black hearted rebel
September 9
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This was an interesting write and I love it but you didn't follow my four stanzas....
MyrddinEmrys
September 8

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A whirling dance...
Congratulations on the bronze cup. Your acrostic has a nice flow and great rhymes, and your presentation is full of great information.

Rahad
maa
September 7

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I must admit that such a take on the prompt turns my limited expectations upside down ... probably I need people to destroy my mental constructions, beliefs, hopes, fears, joys - to become unconditioned ... free from conditioning ...
my first reaction in such situations is usually "rejection" ... but later, when the knots of resistance have loosened a bit, I start to smile and then to laugh ...
another message of "don't take yourself too seriously" ...
a truly humbling experience for my ego and and invitation to surrender my arrogance ...

no need to add that your verse is excellent as usual ...
close to divine ... if not divine ...

thank you so much,
maa
Star Shine
September 3

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Very creative, the photos are incredible, the beauty of the second photograph in its rogue and awesome power makes me bow again before the wonders of nature. You soften the issue with humor, which often soothes a savage. Best of luck in the contest.
French Tries
September 2

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Oh, this is definitely an interesting poem, which raises through a wonderful imagery and an unexpected way the problem of inescapable damage caused by hurricanes. An alarming wrenching passion in Natural effects. Nature as the stage where actors have powerful emotions ... whose consequences above the theatre/ outside life can't be controlled by powerless spectators ... Powerless in front of the intensity of the passionate distress...
trekkergirl
September 1

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I had until recently never seen poems written like these. I think that they must be very difficult to write. You did well writing this one. Thanks for sharing