And there it is
The pain in my right ankle
each time it makes impact
with the unforgiving
concrete below.
I don't mind the pain, though,
in fact, I've been counting on it
and instead of slowing down, I
pick up the pace.
I don't know what I do
to resurrect the memories
Maybe I inhale....
maybe I exhale....
But suddenly I am back
in your car and we are laughing
so hard that I wonder if anyone has ever
had to live their whole life without
ever feeling this connected.
That's when I remember your eyes
the way you looked at me, and I
can feel your kiss...
can feel your touch...
And the only thing I can do
is the very same thing that caused
us both all of this heartache to begin with,
I run.
What'cha think?
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This I really like. It gives me an insight into you and your feelings, which, shows a bit of vulnerability that you don't show in your conversation. That last stanza, it is so so good.
Haven't we all done that, sometime?
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Thanks
Vulnerability is one of my greatest challenges, always has been. I'm trying very hard not to "run" from life anymore.....
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Oh yes, I like this. An honest glimpse of life, and the thoughts that intrude on the everyday. I like the theme of running, and I know how poetry is born from the rhythms of the body in motion. Good stuff.
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There seems to be a theme.
I do like this. I especially like the stanza about ever feeling this connected. A relationship like that is awesome - but even those relationships don't always work.
Sometimes running is a good thing, sometimes we do it out of fear. We just have to be honest without ourselves about the why.
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Thanks! This one makes me sad
. Long story,....... dime a dozen.
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now you have me wondering about the last..lol
this is excellent as is...great job you two
peace Muddy
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I think this might have been even better without the last stanza. The language is clear, though - and the piece works pretty well.
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Yeah, I agree. I was a little if'ey on it also. I'll try it without...
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