And I wrote my heart in words
"i love you's"
whispered heart to heart-
found in a dream,
golden thread of lifeline-
sent somewhere out there,
from here, it drifts,
drifts through passages,
passages of destiny,
destiny, now that has been
forever changed,
changed my heart,
to one that has courage,
And I wrote my heart in words-
"i love you"
whispered heart to heart-
Forever entrusted with
dreams of tomorrows
that never arrive-
Holding onto lifeline,
'Till Forever arrives
somewhere, someday
with you.
Author notes
Ask me no questions, I'll tell you no lies
A contest entry
- How much can you take? by Wulf-Eyez De Winter.
450 points, ended September 7, 15 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful
Very nice work here and such love portrayed -
Ooooooo~
Oh My I know how I missed this one for I was offline for awhile
Beauty of a piece spoken from the Heart~
Woot~
What a write
Congratulations on Your HM!
*throws confetti*
Wahoooooo
This gets the insides all mushy
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Very good write here
Love never leaves or fades when its so stored within the heart -
Thanks for posting this in the lionsloves lair. What a great set of words!
3 claps = 9 points
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Beautiful
When two souls melt into one, that's the true love that lives through all ups and downs for eternity... this is the love we all dream of and you've penned everyone's emotions in such a beautiful poetry... absolutely love it... thanks for sharing your talent... take care Minoo
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How truly beautiful this is! Sigh...
I LOVE love poems and this is a beauty of a piece
Wonderfully written, hon!
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This style of linking phrases and repetition works so well in this romantic piece. Strong and sensitive, very pleasing.
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Excellent
What a great creation for the theme. So very well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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i really like this poem...
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a write filled with everlasting love and devotion spoken from the heart once here and now entombed in our thoughts. thanx for sharing and many blessings always xxx
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Hmmm...
Four out of four reviews have given you full marks.
So I read and reread... trying to see either the beauty or the profundity that is obviously escaping me.
While it's true that I've never read this exact composition before tonight, I... I'm not seeing anything new here regards love poems. I don't see any decorative language. This isn't really a metaphor piece, nor a poem filled with delicious irony. We're not looking at personification or clever construction, really.
So the problem must be me, not you, as I'm in a definite minority opinion here. No ill will is offered here, I wish you the best in future writes and you may content yourself with the notion that I'm just a silly schlub from the wrong demographic that stepped into the wrong room at the wrong time.
Best to you!
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When two become one then real love has arrived and it changes our lives forever even when it ends we learn what we want or did not want. it a learning lesson about life,love and the sorrows that go with it. The path of true love does not run easy. It proven fact people who bond in the hard times is less likely to leave the other if one or the other pulls away it weakens the relationship. Great write with many feeling wrap up in so few words.
. Rewarded 8
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Lovely
I truly believe that when one falls in love its like their love is tattooed upon their heart and thats why when a couple breaks up you can never erase the past love completely
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Beautifully penned
The emotions behind it were great
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This is beautiful! You compose the best love poems with passion and feeling.
Love,
Amera♥
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Very pretty Sis. Such beautiful thoughts!
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Thanks Sis,
and yes you know already Dont have to say it.
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