Oh my love
you have made me categorically a blind fellow,
I can't see anything else except to your enchanting skin,
I am enduring in the room of your skin
since the many centuries
trying to decipher its
reverent posts which God has transcribed in it
making me to know the definition of the womanhood
I am trying my hard
to be the fruitful beloved of this cosmos
while perceiving the cheer of your nude legs
Oh my love...
A contest entry
- Give me some LOVE by Ken-Maverick.
540 points, ended September 6, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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such a sensual adoration.
your use of language is refreshingly different. feels exotic - like a secret love letter translated from another language.
i like this. - NANGALEEMA
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''seduction leads to destruction''-the maine
hurray. -
oh the beauty of seduction, especially by a person you truly love.
nice words.
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Beautiful
I love this. It speaks of a man trying to understand and relate to the beauty of his woman in the whole. I love how you played with the metaphors and your imagery was amazing. Great write. Yours in poetry,
gypsy
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Very different!
A new take on love and life! Very inspired! A strong statement of devotion with a metaphot that's barely hidden. Good work. I like this one!
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Such beauty in this one, the way you capture her is delightful.
A most romantic write of love.
Hugs
~Lisa~
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Absolutely beautiful. Very sensual and love positively shines throughout every word.
I love this. Best of luck in the contest!
Annie
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one more good work that relates to the beautiful existence of love. congrats.
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very honest and straight. i don't see too much philosophy here, but the pure, powerful drive of love. bared to the skin. evocative. convincing.
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I can feel the 'leaning in close' in the words and the image only adds to the effect of a man being drawn closer to a woman. I smiled at the word 'posts' describing legs-to my interpretation, but I suppose they are supports of a particular design...or perhaps you meant 'posts' as in messages to be deciphered as they are sent through the soft touch of skin to skin...I like both interpretations myself. You have a glowy sensual piece here, my friend and I hope it does well in the contest. Peace, Rhonda
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First impression is you are trying to impress the lady. Hope it worked. There's nothing grander than love.
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this is beautiful, from the heart of a true romanic. well done, my friend.
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