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Shamrock Sails

Sparing the seas

 but slicing through the wake.

Chasing the river upstream,

I caught a sight of a boat.

It was white with green.

 A simple name, taken in context

that reminded,

 there exists an angel

who's wings beat solely for me.

 

She is still in the morning light

 chasing cobwebs from her dreams

   and remembering peace.

She doesn't wake when I leave,

 but is up and waiting

  when the drapes part

    and I am back on feathered feet.

 

Absence makes the heart grow fonder,

 and ascent makes my arms ache,

but never have I ever

 longed so much for forever,

 

as long as she stays there,

    to greet me...

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  • Bean Sidhe silver member
    September 7

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    I tried really hard to be critical of this one but the last thirteen lines are just beautiful. "feathered feet" is a perfect description of sneaking back in from the balcony and the lines that follow remind me what a talented writer you truly are.

    "Ascent makes my arms ache" alone is very powerful but when combined with the previous line (so easily made cliche), takes my breath away. I'm certain that you did that purposely as you put more thought into your work than the average poet.

    Just lovely, sweetheart.
    Thank you.