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Hold

Even though I feel as though I've lost my way
I need you to hold me to make it through the day.
When I am stuck in such despair and feel like I'm dying
I want you to hold me and keep me from crying.
Hold me gentle under the beautiful starry night,
Wrapped up in your arms nice and tight.
If I were to fall down into a deep anguish
Would you hold me to save me from an darkly parish.
Would you hold me if I begged you to?
Or would you toss me away and discard me like broken bamboo?
Hold me safe and warm in your embrace
Putting my heart and mind in a state of grace.

Would you hold me forever, never letting me go?

Or would you leave me to forever woe?

Hold me like your life depended on it, never letting me
Go until your dying day.

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4. Hold-Superchicks
And I know it feels pretty rushed, but Iknow I did good pretty good on it.

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  • Silverstar1993
    September 8

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    It's very, very, good. I wish I got comments like you did on my poems, but yours has so much more feeling. It goes great with the song, and it rhymes. It's almost out of rhythm in some parts, but you don't notice it. Good luck!

  • Cottoncandyrose
    September 8

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    Incredible

    This is so amazing. My favorite part is Hold me gentle under the beautiful starry night, Wrapped up in your arms nice and tight, that is so romantic and beautiful. I feel this way right now about One guy he has told me that I am the only one for him and that he will hold me and never let me go.. It is so awesome to have someone say that to you. The title is beautiful and I think that it makes the poem become a reality. It's an all around good write keep up the good work, I cant wait to read more of your poems..

  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    September 7

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    Just beautiful sentiments of the loving heart you brought..wonderful indeed.....I love it..well done..and thanks for sharing it...

  • VampireSeductress
    September 7

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    I love this write. Each line wonderfully said. "Putting my heart and mind in a state of grace" Nice.
    Beautiful write