When I cannot smile
And my sky is stormy gray,
You bring me yellow sunflowers
To brighten up my day.
When I want to shout,
And smash our china plates,
You bring me bright red roses:
I feel my wrath abate.
When I don’t want to talk, but
Let sullen silence grow,
You bring me pure white daisies
And set my face aglow.
You brighten up my mood,
Whatever it may be
And all I have to give you
Is I, myself—me.
Author notes
"You don't See Me".
koganei55, prompt 4
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man i wish someone gave ME flowers like every day!!! lol just kidding
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This made me smile. I loved how you tied flowers to your emotions. Nice rhyme and great wording.
'You bring me pure white daisies
And set my face aglow.'
These were my favorite lines.
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personifying you feeling thru flowers really works here. <>< yay for fish! -
all those flowers wrapped in human emotions made me smile too,and was interesting to read...nice poem
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This poem gave me the biggest smile.
This is too damn cute; how the simplest of things can so easily brighten the mood. I love this poem.
Though I'm not fond of rhyming poetry, this write had just enough to make it noticable, but it wasn't enough to make it overbearing.
As said before, I love this poem, it's all too cute.
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What a lovely, upbeat write. Sounds like your happiness resides in this person who can help you back to joy when you aren't feeling joyful.
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I always wish I could write romance, when i try it sounds ebroidered and mushy and false. This echoed unconditional love, and needed no fancy wrapping, what you see is what you get. Sorry but Idon't know enough about accademics of poetry to be more constructive
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Aww thanks for entering and good luck
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Great Rhythm and flows softly like gifts of love petals. Language of gifts.
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Always nice to give gifts to one you love care about. Cements the love and make it grow. Thank you for sharing.
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