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Deep love

Deep love

Do you fell my breath upon your skin.
Chocolate kisses, leave me breathless.
Sending you deep upon me.
Flames struck me like a fire never seen before.
I open up to you,
Like vibrations we bring to the floor.
Your my rock,your perfection is endless.
Sending me on the stairs to heaven.
With you there are no rules. 
We must un cage your tigers,
And let the birds fly free.

Author notes

Word Bank 1
*breath
*chocolate
*deep
Word Bank 2
*flame
*open
*vibrations
Word Bank 3
*rock
*stairs
*floor
Word Bank 4
*rules
*tigers
*birds


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  • TabbyJoy
    October 29

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    I love the last two lines. You did a great job weaving the word bank words into this piece naturally and in an unforced way. There were a couple punctuation and spelling errors that were distracting, but it was still an enjoyable read.

  • Sensual Angel gold member
    September 28

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    Excellent job with the words banks. this poem is outstanding. the imagery is very vivid and I truly enjoyed reading this..

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • Woodchuck4400 silver member
    September 8

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    Great job at using words from multiple word banks. You have compose a poem with gorgeous imagery.

    Mike

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