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True love.

I have finally,
found, what I
have been looking for.
A girl to love and adore.
You are the one I am sure,
not just the girl next door.

I was scared at first,of
what you would say.
Scared you would blow me away.
My fears I need not have,
you did not laugh.

Since the first date,I knew,
I was in love with you.
your hair, your eyes,
your pouting lips,
how could I resist.
And when we kiss,
our mouths as one,
I know I am the lucky one.

When together we lie in bed,
your hands touch me so,
and I touch you, were
no other man, is allowed,
to go, you know,we have
found ,what we already know,
true love,
watch it grow.

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  • PurringKitten
    September 12

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    JUST BEAUTIFUL

    your sweet words do flow like a soft love song for the heart to feed upon...true love is a wonderful thing...keep the pen to paper my freind for you truly have it going on

  • piccola gold member
    September 9

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    Nice idea, the rhyme is good but it could be better if there were line divisions to set it apart. This always brings strength to rhyme and sets it apart visually from free-verse. For example:

    I have finally found
    what I have been looking for.
    A girl to love and adore.
    You are the one I am sure,
    not just the girl next door.

    I was scared at first
    of what you would say.
    Scared you would
    blow me away.

    My fears I need not have,
    you did not laugh.
    Since the first date I knew
    I was in love with you.

    Just an idea, but the divisions make it easier
    to find the rhyme and therefore strengthens it.