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bukowski

I've been reading bukowski
all fucking day
what a hypocrite

I won't admit

my own selfishness

I'll just drown myself

in a dead man's poetry

lukemia at 73

the worst is bound to become of me

 

Tuesdays are longer than mondays

faces the same and mundane

cry and cry and complain

light a joint to explain

why the sky looks that way

and why obama and why mccain

someone needs to tell us what to do

without bullshit guidance, we'll be screwed

 

Suffocating institutions

human error, I guess that's polution

what the fuck is evolution

we're all dumbasses, we need a solution.

 

I hope my lungs

don't turn to shit

I'm too young

to feel like this.

 

Cigarettes

put me in debt

I'm paying some guy

to kill myself.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • artis gold member
    September 14
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  • atty-poet
    September 11

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    Ah, bukowski. Love him or hate him, and even if you hate him, you gotta love him. Don't know that he would go for a poem that so obviously rhymes, and that's my only real criticism here. Love the candid relevance of this piece nonetheless. Except the last stanza is the weak landing. Finish on "paying some guy to kill myself" instead. Ol' Hank would appreciate that one, and buy you a beer.

  • Trystan
    September 10

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    yeah

    "Cigarettes
    put me in debt
    I'm paying some guy
    to kill myself."

    Ah. Yes, me too. Nice poem. Bukowski is fucking great.


  • silverfish
    September 10

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    my. my. so young to have bukowski in your head and smoke in your lungs. the raw cynicism with institutional learning in the poem reminds me a little bit of pink floyd's 'the wall', but maybe the answers in life begin with the questions; growth is a slow 'evolution'. honest, searching poetry like this can be such a breath of fresh air. -silverfish


  • FelineMuse
    September 10

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    "light a joint to explain
    why the sky looks that way
    and why obama and why mccain"

    I chose to interpret this as the sky, Obama, and McCain only making sense if one were high.

    I think I like those lines because they reminds me of AE Hausman:
    "Ale, man, ale's the stuff to drink
    For fellows whom it hurts to think:
    Look into the pewter pot
    To see the world as the world's not."


    • Beata
      September 10
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      that's exactly what I was going for, who knew Hausman did it already

  • ArchOblivion
    September 9

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    Wow I'm at a loss, i know this isn't in depth critique or anything but I really liked this. It's very relevant and i could just hear someone like yelling it to me and knocking on my hollow head. This was probably my favorite line:

    "Cigarettes
    put me in debt
    I'm paying some guy
    to kill myself."

    Do I ever know what you mean. Nicely done.


    • Beata
      September 9
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      Wow, thank you. I'm glad my poetry screams at its readers. Thank you for the kind words
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