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New Puppy

The needle pierces

chenille plush fabric beginnings

to pattern happiness

from a selfless deed.

 

Track markings in clear thread

are the tidings of a divorced mind

from its own self.

 

Focused for the moment

on creating a comfort

for another.

 

The future looks brighter

through eyes without guile

and a smile that could melt

a polar bear.

 

 

Author notes

For Allison. I hope she likes her new puppy I made for her. Allison is a child going through chemo. I made a puppy for her when she lost her own a few weeks back. Perspective takes hold, when those like myself realize there are children going through the same things we are as an adult.

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  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    September 30

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    Hood Winked!!

    Hi there this is a veery nice thing for you to have done for this youngster and your poem is beautiful and your background is amazing thanks for sharing much love always


  • ShelleyA gold member
    September 27

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    Hood-Winked!

    A beautiful write for Alison. Heartfelt and poignant. Lovely depth of feeling. Very nice presentation. Each word knitted together shows your love for her. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Well penned. You have just been hood-winked by a member of The Poetic Bandits.


  • tawk gold member
    September 26

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    Hood-Wink!

    Wow what a powerful and emotion packed write! Yes there is always someone going through something worse than us we need only to look around. Amazing write so full of vivid imagery and emotion. Keep up the amazing writing. hugs Theresa


  • PhoenixFaith
    September 26
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    Hoodwinked

    What a cute and sentimental little piece. I really needed an uplifting today. Thank you for sharing this piece. Great job dear poet. And a really like this piece, so I hope that you keep up writing. Love the background too.

    Always write from the heart
    Never give up
    Kate


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    September 25
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    Hood-Winked!

    Oh Hetha, this is a poignant and lovely poem that says so much between it's brief lines. I'm glad this young girl and you have met, and that in providing comfort for her, you found comfort also. Beautiful.

    I earnestly hope that both of you are soon on the road to good health.

    I love your background, by the way!


  • ml12
    September 25

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    Hood-Wink

    This is a really sad piece given the AN. I like how the people is slightly hopeful and I enjoyed reading this. I hope things work out for the kid and you. Cheers


  • Starlight-Owl
    September 25

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    Hood-wink!

    There is so much emotion that lies within these lines. It really warmed my heart to read this. It was just so well written and with a good message. Excellent write, and enjoy the spotlight.


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    September 25

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    Hood-Winked

    I think this is a powerful and emotive write with strong intent and beautiful feeling. You are a lovely person and this shines through your poem.


  • dustookie2 gold member
    September 25

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    Hood Winked!!

    There is such emotion within your lines and perhaps a reminder to be more understanding of others experiences....it is not all about me when we live in a world where many think it is about them...the X generation. You held my attention through the pain to that beautiful ending we can melt a polar bear heart with a little more love. Thank you for this my poetic journey of this Hood Wink... am holding you in my prayers as you travel your own journey.


  • toomysterious
    September 18

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    Emotionally powerful write. Amazing the things that can bring comfort in times like these. Good to see you writing again. Hope to see lots more of you soon.


  • quantumsurveyor
    September 18
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    "Eyes without guile and a smile that could melt a polar bear" magically done.

  • Allan Emery silver member
    September 17

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    It is soo good to see your work here complete with a piece of your wonderful heart in it! Hope all is well. Have some bunnies that are just as good as puppies!!!

  • xJustifiablyMex
    September 17

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    It's hard to know what to say without sounding condescending...Allison is a lucky girl to have you supporting her and you're a fortunate lady sharing her smiles. I wish you both lots of strength on your journey and as always, lots and lots of love.
    I love you Sis and I'm with you even when you sleep.

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