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wildflowers

 

goldenrod stretches

across the meadow

like morning sun


fireweed sparks

over wheatgrass

into the sweet aroma

of wild rose


we dance together

in a blanket

of blue lupines

and windsong

 

your hands

spread naturally

among the moving

composition

of my hips

 


 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Candy6
    November 3
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    beautiful


  • silkypoet
    October 18

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    lovely

    I love flowers so quite naturally I loved this piece, well written, nice form, my favorite stanza is "the big ending" I love big endings. The only thing I didn't like was the use of &. I hate that damn thing, I think a pause (comma) after lupines would look more beautiful. It's great work though.

    Lori


    • tara wilson gold member
      October 18
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      thanks so much for your comment, I applied the same kind of comma separation in the stanza above it also.
      it's different than how I'd normally write, and creates a little bit of a different mood/feel - I really like it=)
  • Virgoan
    October 9

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    Have i said how this perfectly sets the mood?

    Excellent tara


  • Grunts Girl
    October 5

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    i loved the sensuality of this
    i almost would do away with the last line completely and leave it with composition.. but that is me-- just ignore the old lady behind the keys.


    • tara wilson gold member
      October 5
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      you are so right about the last line, ending it at composition, just working on that line a bit before composition though, thanks so much!=)

  • markgrif gold member
    October 3
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    Beautiful.. makes me tear


  • Adsaige gold member
    September 23

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    Oh, beautiful. Your poetry is as usual, stunning in it's gentle words and flowing script. I would love to be able to capture and set words and hearts on fire the way you are able to. There is such profound beauty and sensuousness in here. Beautiful.




  • Kiran silver member
    September 23
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    Sensual and full of beauty! Loved this!


  • myrataal silver member
    September 22

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    Sweet motion of moments fragrant ...

    composition of sound, word play and metaphor.
    Ah.
    How beautiful the meadows of love, shifting in its intimate dance of colorful breeze.



    Myra


  • Meej
    September 21

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    this is sensual and intimate without being crass and over the top sexual. Nice work on this poem and well done on your hm.


  • And Hyetal gold member
    September 20

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    I love your references to the flowers... I agree with the post below; this write is definitely a goosebump-giver.

    Loved it.

    ~Cassie


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    September 20
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    This gave me goose bumps Tara, a magical write indeed.


    with much love,
    mj.


  • Swan song gold member
    September 20
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    you are too hot dear!!!!! wow!


  • MariGoes silver member
    September 20
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    This is soft and makes one dream


  • Sonja
    September 20

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    Perfect!

    waw... sometimes I can't say more but you always know what I think.
    ~Sonja~


  • CaliOkie silver member
    September 19

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    Beautiful. So gentle your words and soft the textures you conjure up. Yet, there is an earthy heat smoldering there, just below the surface before it finds its way out. A slow heat that simmers like spring afternoons and dark soil -- damp and warm under the sun. It is the heat of life.

    As always, your words take me to places I long to be.

    Garrison


  • Allyce May
    September 19

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    Gorgeous, the last three lines are perfect


  • Peteskid gold member
    September 19
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    very nice, strong sense of caring comes through...PK


  • GreenHrtPaleMoon gold member
    September 18

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    We both picked the same pic, and picked up on that same golden aura. Love it! The way your descriptions flowed into movement and that delicious end was stunning. Marvelous write!


  • delightfulmess gold member
    September 18

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    OOOh what a elegant sensual delight you have
    penned here. Great visions come to my mind
    sigh...
    Well done and thank you for entering my contest.



    Delila


  • aliceramone silver member
    September 18

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    lovely, sleek and sensual...a poetic groove that inspires...love ur new pic too...lovely cheeks...great write.


  • LionSwanLover
    September 18

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    I am always envious of poets who paint live and vivid pictures with so few words. This is beatuiful and textured- and so perfectly executed. What a gem!
    Beautifully done.


  • Balldinger silver member
    September 18

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    engine extension...

    written in true Seminole fashion - flowery, fluent and fragrant like a glass mattress in a freeway divide. hoist it high overhead and tumble in a weed, aware of science; aware of fortitude; aware of sweet composition

    Flayed open just right, Ms. March...


  • melphleg gold member
    September 18

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    wow

    You have such great imagery in this piece. I love the sensuality which is expressed so cleanly. It takes a real poet to write something sensual without being erotic. To use the metaphors you did creates a beautiful picture of sensual love.

  • kaibab silver member
    September 18

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    Just wonderful...I love this ,meadow fillwith blossoms of opening fingers...such a mountain sound to it


  • faderman1959
    September 18
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    The beauty of nature and a woman is blended perfectly here! Very sensual and erotic! Winderful!


  • silverfish
    September 18

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    sensual, yes. very much in the realm of the sensational, i would say. and i know how that golden rod feels. mmmmmm. nice. -wildfish


  • Jersene gold member
    September 18
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    this is beautifully sensual


  • Blueskywonder
    September 18
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    Dreamy and most beautiful!


  • Harrisham Minhas
    September 18

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    Colorful and softly sensual.

    Good luck in the contest.



  • Melodies silver member
    September 18

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    A touching nature scene, truly!


  • Nicolette gold member
    September 18

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    Beautiful poetry...so softly sensual and fragrant. Loved the sense of movement here.



    ~ Nicolette


  • Candy6
    September 18
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    beautiful

    Very good write


  • Suzanne Dia gold member
    September 18

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    yum yum

    seriously
    love the way you used the flowers to describe such a sensual scene

  • Yellowdogpoetry gold member
    September 18

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    Perfectly lovely. This piece encourages a deep breath and a slow exhale. Beautiful imagery, setting, and delicate yet potent sensuality. Started my day reading this, gonna be a very good day! Geo

  • Thoughts-of-Soloman gold member
    September 18

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    Such a visually colourful feast... loosing nothing as it becomes transformed into a sensual one.

    Golden Rod was just about the first plant name I learnt as a child, due to helping my parents gather it once to make wine.

    Beautiful

    Sol

  • Yvette Champ
    September 18
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    Delicious poetry, perfect metaphor and movement, beautiful wildflowers! Kudos.


  • zochit2me gold member
    September 18

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    Oh I can visualize this as well as smell the scents

    Well done Tara



    ♥Becky♥


  • hotchocolate gold member
    September 18
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    I like this nice use of words!


  • Tennessee-Joe
    September 18
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    Smell You

    You have added smell to this poem, as well as nice visuals.
    Cool.
    Joe

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