Promises are for fools
the only real is you.
breathe darling breathe
do it
touch
the call from with in
live!
breathe!
color red
defy
stand and breathe
dance darling dance
touch stretch upwards
ever upwards.
death comes quickly
life is over
will you live?
cower no
please no
Breathe!
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt ~ 15 poets - 20 lines ~ 2 to go... and we close by Florida Sunshine.
450 points, ended October 11, 14 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Touch me back.
Comments
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this reminds me of a new born, being coaxed into first breath. New life is beautiful...
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this has a gush quality that I find brings the reader right into the poem, congratulations on the honorable mention.
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Awesome
I really like this.
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I like the different feels to it that this poem expresses, of much value. This write had a rush to it, fast-paced beat.
This one was good.
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Your poem gave me chills...There are many different avenues you've put into this... this write gives an 'internal' feel versus the 'external' image. Excellent take to the prompt~ I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem a great deal.
Thanks so much for entering the contest, and taking the time to write especially for the contest ~ it was a welcome treat to read and review your work.
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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Wonderful
Very well done. A great creation for the picture. Best of luck in the contest.
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Wonderfully well written! BRAVO!
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yes, who could disagree? the only real are our own reality. All of this dependent upon one thing-breathe.
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i love this sense of urgency i get from the poem...brilliant the way that you write like this. I just loved how short worded it was it added to the sense that there was almost a panic....FABULOUS....keep it up....scars.
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